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Latest comment: 25 days ago by Bremps in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Nominator: Bremps (talk · contribs) 21:39, 21 May 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:05, 29 September 2024 (UTC)Reply


  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a. (reference section):  
    b. (citations to reliable sources):  
    c. (OR):  
    d. (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a. (major aspects):  
    b. (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):  
    b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/fail:  

(Criteria marked   are unassessed)

You have been waiting too long for this, so I will review now of course! --K. Peake 11:05, 29 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • The infobox release date may be of the song on the album, but this still needs to be sourced in the body
  • Remove jazz and rhythm and blues from the genres since these are only sourced as elements
  • Remove full-stop at the end of the length
  • Audio sample should be in the body instead with info added to the text
  • The lead is too short; information needs to be added about the composition, more on lyrics and reception too
  • "The song is inspired by" → "The song was inspired by" and shouldn't the name of the story be surrounded by speech marks?
  • "Described as Dao's "comeback anthem"," should be re-worded as something to make it more clear that this was after he produced little for a decade
  • "it was streamed over 10 billion times within two months of its release," → "it was viewed over 10 billion times within two months of release," per the body
  • "and attracted widespread speculation as to the meaning of its "cryptic" and "absurd"" → "The song attracted speculation as to the meaning of its satirical" to summarize better, starting a new sentence and add a bit more about the lyrical content of the song too

Background

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  • "(as of January 2005)," → "by January 2005,"
  • [3][1][4][5] should be in numerical order
  • [3][1][6] should be in numerical order
  • Change "in 2023" to mentioning the exact date of the album instead so the release date in the infobox is sourced

Composition

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Inspiration

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  • Move img to the left
  • The story named in the infobox should be mentioned in prose here for it to properly sourced

Lyrics, interpretation and instrumentation

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  • [3] should only be invoked at the end of the first sentence not after cryptic too, as the end is literally next from this
  • Ditto for the Ludwig Wittgenstein sentence especially since there is another ref backing this up
  • Pipe compound ideograph to Compound ideographs itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • Img looks good!
  • "Chinese music industry, including Na Ying," → "Chinese music industry, including Ying,"
  • "believed that this song" → "believed that the song" but this quote does not appear to be sourced
  • "readings draw parallels" → "readings drew parallels"
  • "that dominates throughout."" → "that dominates throughout"." per MOS:QUOTE

Reception and charts

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  • Retitle to Reception since chart performance counts as a form of this
  • Mention the names of any reviewers who are identified from the sources
  • "volcanic anti-establishment mentality."" → "volcanic anti-establishment mentality"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • "Singer Wang Feng, who is possibly" → "Feng, who is possibly" since his full name was already used in the previous section

Commercial performance

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  • "and as of December 29, 2023," → "and up to December 29, 2023,"

Notes

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  • [3] does not need to be invoked since it is already at the end of the same sentence as the note in prose

References

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Final comments and verdict

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