Talk:Love (Destiny)/GA1

GA Review

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

---

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 20:10, 27 September 2016 (UTC) → Soon... Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:10, 27 September 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• Ayumi Hamasaki. It served as the second single from Hamasaki's second studio album Loveppears (1999). → Ayumi Hamasaki, serving as the second single for her second studio album, Loveppears (1999).
• There are three official versions of the single: a ballad version arranged by Tsunku, an edited version featuring vocals by Tsunku, the vocalist of the band Sharan Q, and a dance-influenced version that was included on Loveppears. → Three versions of the recording have been made available—a ballad version arranged by Tsunku, an edited version with vocals by Tsunku, and a dance-influenced version included on Loveppears.
• Link music critics to "music journalism"
• music critics. Some highlighted → music critics, with some highlighting
• Commercially, the single → Commercially, the recording
• was a success → experienced success
• her first record → her first song ("record" is mainly used for album releases)
• It became → It also became
• entered again on both record charts → and re-entered both charts.
• which featured → and featured
• singing the song → singing to the song
• To promote the single → In order to promote the single
• link "remix and greatest hits compilations" to their respective articles on Wikipedia
• It was used → It was also used
• official theme song → remove "official"
• the Japanese → Japanese
• To date, it is → To date, it remains
• highest selling → highest-selling

Infobox

• Digital download → digital download
• Remove full stops after each caption

Versions and composition

• I prefer editing the section about the versions by myself, as there are too many errors to list them comfortably here.
• is heavily influenced throughout the album → heavily influences the album
• sheet music at → sheet music published by
• each recording → each track

Release

• "Love (Destiny)" It was → "Love (Destiny)" was released
• tracks; the first two being the original recordings, whilst he latter two are instrumentals. → track, with the first two being the original recordings and the rest instrumentals.
• Then on February → Subsequently, on February
• set comma after "previous album track".
• The CD single was marked with a special colored, this being brown. → This is overfluous and can be easily seen in the infobox, thus no need to write this out

Reception

• A reviewer at Amazon.com → A reviewer at Amazon
• whom praised → and praised
• was a success → experienced success
• week of sales → week of availability
• it then went → The recording then went
• in that chart → on that chart
• making it Hamasaki's longest charting single → marking the singer's longest-charting release
• they both → both tracks
• longest spanning → longest-spanning
• By the end of 1999, it → By the end of 1999, "Love (Destiny)"
• chart; the single was ranked behind two of Hamasaki's other releases, "Boys & Girls" and her EP A, and was the ninth highest selling single by a female artist → chart behind two fellow releases of the singer, "Boy & Girls" (RELEASE DATE) and her extended play A (RElEASE DATE).
• Likewise, it ranked → Likewise, it charted
• 12 highest selling single → 12th highest-selling song
• data base → database
• CD's → CDs
• for 4 weeks on the top → four weeks within the top
• However, the single reached number 100 on TBS Count Down TV chart on May 14, 2001, her lowest entry on that chart to date.[23] → you should mention this earlier in this section

Music video and promotion

• single version → remove "version"
• As usual, I prefer editing the synopsis before passing this article.
• It was used → It was additionally
• the Japanese television → remove "the"
• Remove "this being her"
• A remix by → A remix produced by
• on two of Hamasaki's greatest hits album → plural please
• Remove "that being" here as well
• The song has been included → "Love (Destiny)" has further been included

Certifications and sales

• N/A → None
• Remove full stops

Release history

• Use scope="row" for countries
• Unlink formats and labels as usual

Notes

• There is currently insufficient evidence to determine what date Hamasaki's digital releases appeared on online retails. The closest source for iTunes Store evidence is at Jame World, whom confirmed Hamasaki's work was released worldwide on iTunes in September 2008. → Do the same what you did on "Kanariya" please.

References

• There's an issue with reference #41

Outcome

• I've put this  On hold for 7 days to allow edits. Don't forget to ping me when you're ready or have a question. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:07, 3 October 2016 (UTC)
  • @Cartoon network freak: All complete CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 03:56, 13 October 2016 (UTC)
    • Passing! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:14, 13 October 2016 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.