Talk:Led Zeppelin (album)/GA1

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 04:57, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• I'll just grab this one while I can... FunkMonk (talk) 04:57, 4 September 2018 (UTC)
• As usual, some duplinks.

Oh yeah, I did those, edit conflicted with FlightTime who was fixing something else, and forgot to redo them. Fixed. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 14:54, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• Give a date for the Hindenburg disaster in the article and caption?

Done Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 14:54, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• Sources for notes?

Done Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 14:54, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• I don't think the title "Live – Olympia, Paris, France, 10 October 1969" should have links under the tracklisting, it should be in the preceding prose.

Good point. Trimmed Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 14:54, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

Maybe Olympia could be mentioned and linked in the prose. FunkMonk (talk) 20:49, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

Done, though Olympia (Paris) is in a bit of a sorry state - I can't believe the most important thing in the lead is which Metro station it's near! Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 21:24, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• "a tour Scandinavia" Tour of?

Oh yeah :-/ Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 20:09, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• "changed the band's name to Led Zeppelin" Could be a good place to link the band first time out of the intro.

Good point, well made

• "not yet signed their deal with Atlantic Records" Link?

Thought it was linked earlier, but obviously not. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 20:09, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• "it was seldom performed live" I don't trust my non-native English skills entirely, but should it be "seldomly" here?

The best judge is a Google Books search with the phrase, which in this instance gives you this :-) Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 20:09, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

I since looked it up too, and seems the use of "seldomly" is discouraged... FunkMonk (talk) 20:46, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• "Until late 1960s" The?

The source doesn't actually mention the late 1960s specifically, so reworded instead. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 20:09, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• "after Page injured a finger" Injured by playing the song, or was it just harder to play due to the injury?

All the source says is "the number had to be dropped for the first two weeks, when Jimmy injured his finger just before the tour." No other specifics, I'm afraid. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 20:09, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• " "Baby Come On Home" and "Sugar Mama" both appeared on the 2015 reissue" Seems they have been released before, though?

The 2015 Coda expansion was (according to the source) the first time the songs were released, so clarified. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 20:09, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

The Baby Come On Home article states it was released earlier on a box set, but no big deal. FunkMonk (talk) 20:46, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

I don't think I've actually got a reliable source for that, and in that article it's unsourced. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 21:21, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• "The album cover further widespread attention" Missing word?

More like my brain fell out. Fixed! Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 21:19, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• Link David Fricke?

Didn't know he was notable :-/ Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 21:19, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• I think it's worth a mention in the intro that much of the material was played by the Yarbirds earlier.

I think it's only "Dazed And Confused". Indeed, the "Background" section says the group's first Scandanavian tour featured Yardbirds hits (eg: Train Kept A Rollin', For Your Love, what else?) along with the songs on this LP. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 21:19, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• "and less than £2000 to complete" Why not just give the exact amount as you do in the article body? Doesn't take up more space.

I just don't think it matters as much for the lead. For somebody who just wants the basics from the top and nothing else, it makes more sense to present a rough ballpark figure. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 21:19, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• "endeared them to parts of the counterculture" Only stated in intro, with no source.

Tweaked Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 21:19, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

• That should be it, passing now. I wonder if the intro should have a word on the cover, but no big deal. FunkMonk (talk) 21:35, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

It's not exactly Sgt Pepper or The Dark Side of the Moon in terms of covers, so I don't think it's vital. I might have a think about it. Anyway, cheers for a good review - jeez, I shouldn't copyedit when tired though! Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 21:38, 4 September 2018 (UTC)