Talk:Laika: Aged Through Blood/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: PresN (talk · contribs) 03:50, 24 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 23:45, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be reviewing this article as part of the ongoing GAN backlog drive. --Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 23:45, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Initial comments

• There is unlikely any copyright violation in the article. Earwig's Copyvio Detector has reported only 17.4% in similarity.
• There are no cleanup banners, such as those listed at WP:QF, in the article.
• The article is stable.
• No previous GA reviews.

General comments

• Prose, spelling, and grammar checking.
  • "...and PlayStation 4,..." → "and for PlayStation 4,"
  • Remove the last comma in the lede.
  • "...is an 2D side-scrolling..." – replace "an" with "a"
  • "Enemies respawn whenever Laika dies, or if she leaves and re-enters an area" – remove the comma
  • "These weapons have a very limited amount of ammo, but can be reloaded indefinitely by performing a full backwards rotation of the motorcycle." – remove the comma
  • "The weapons are gathered throughout the course of the game, and can be upgraded in the village with resources to have more ammo or reload with less rotation." – remove the comma
  • "...retrieving the bags causes them to disappear" – replace "causes" with "cause"
  • "Eventually the rampant consumption..." → "Eventually, the rampant consumption"
  • "...non-birds hide from the patrolling Bird solidiers" – replace "hide" with "hid"
  • "...passing the abilities to them in turn" → "passing the abilities on to them in turn"
  • "...runs away from home to search herself" → "runs away from home to search for herself"
  • "...a nuclear weapon which will eradicate..." → "a nuclear weapon that will eradicate"
  • "...and along with the motorcycle were intended..." → "and along with the motorcycle, they were intended"
  • "...artstyle..." → "art style"
  • "...had frustrations with some mechanics" – remove had
  • "...that succeeded at connecting to players emotionally" → "that succeeded in connecting with players emotionally"
  • "...and the way that visual and level design..." → "and the way that the visual and level design"
• Checking whether the article complies with MOS.
  • The article complies with the MOS:LEDE, MOS:LAYOUT, MOS:WTW, and MOS:WAF guidelines. There are no embedded lists within the article, so I am skpping MOS:EMBED.