Hi there! I will be reviewing this article using the table below. Comments will follow shortly. Looking forward to getting stuck in :) Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 10:46, September 17, 2022 (UTC)
Hi again, I'm finished the initial review so will put the article on hold for now. It's always great to read interesting articles which come under Women in Red. If you have any questions about my review please do ping me! Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 16:14, September 17, 2022 (UTC)
Thanks for taking this on! Mujinga (talk) 09:19, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
I have answered everything I think, please see what you think Mujinga (talk) 17:35, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Thank you for your responses! I've crossed off everything which is completed, a few suggestions remaining. Let me know if you have any questions or suggestions Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 11:54, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
It's nice to have such a collegiate review! I've made responses below and have requested a copy of the Jenner ODNB article at the resource exchange which will hopefully allow me to wrap up the outstanding issues. Please let me know if there's anything else. Mujinga (talk) 20:38, 19 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
Someone very kindly sent over the article, I can send it over if you'd like but right now your email function is turned off Mujinga (talk) 10:27, 20 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
I've used the ODNB to cover what was left over, I hope Mujinga (talk) 10:46, 20 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
Hi @Mujinga, sorry for not replying for a few days. Thank you for finding the article! Unfortunately it looks like the Wikipedia Library Oxford sources are still out of action, hoping we hear an update soon. I will do a final sweep of the article and your changes. Thanks for your patience :) Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 20:02, 22 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
I'm not too sure about the clarity of the first two sentences. They essentially repeat the same info in close proximity, i.e. "She was an artist and a writer. She studied art and became a writer." The second sentence isn't particularly clear either: She grew up in Cornwall and having studied art in London, she became a writer. It implies that she became a writer because she studied art? I would recommend changing to something like: Kitty Lee Jenner (September 12, 1853 – October 21, 1936) was an English artist and writer. She grew up in Cornwall and studied art in London. She later became a writer and published six novels under the name .... Let me know what you think.
Yes I see what you mean, rephrased Mujinga (talk) 15:44, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Early life
Her artwork was based on sketches and watercolours I don't know if this makes sense. Should it be something like Her artwork consisted of sketches and watercolours?
Rephrased Mujinga (talk) 15:44, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Career
Until her husband's fame grew in his old age, her writing career made her the better known of the two. This sentence feels like it's in the wrong place. Could it go it go at the end of the second paragraph instead?
I think I'd rather keep where it is presently to preserve the chronology Mujinga (talk) 15:44, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Wikilink Jacobites (if this is indeed the correct article)?
In the 1900s, Jenner published three works on the use of symbols in Christianity. As the article previously mentions Jenner's novels, could you specify here that the works on symbols in Christianity are non-fiction?
sure! Mujinga (talk) 15:44, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Five instances of bolding names is quite a lot. Which ones are most significant? Or are they all equally significant?
As I'm sure you are aware, women often have different names over their lifetime and it's hard to know which ones were more significant. I woould say they all are and more to the point, the names redirect here so they should all be bolded. Mujinga (talk) 16:00, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
MOS:LEADBIO says that the first sentence should indicate the main reason the person was notable. From reading the article, that is because of her writing, being a bard and setting up the Cornish Gorsedh. Could you incorporate those into the first sentence?
done Mujinga (talk) 16:00, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
To begin with, she was the more famous person in the relationship. I don't see why this is necessary to include in the lead. It isn't a particularly significant piece of information about Jenner, and implies there is something to come later in the lead regarding Henry Jenner's rise the fame (which isn't included and isn't needed anyway). I suggest removing this sentence.
I'd like to keep it to emphasise she wasn't just the wife of a famous man, as might be thought now her fame as a writer has dwindled Mujinga (talk) 16:00, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
I think you've done a good job in the lead of explaining why she was famous and important in her own right. If you'd like to keep the fame statement in the lead, it will probably need to be backed up by the article or a source as it's potentially open to interpretation. Do you have a source which discusses their comparative fame? Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 11:54, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
It's referenced below, but it's unfortunately referenced to the ODNB article which we can't access right now. I've tried finding it in other ways but haven't been able to. I'm a bit stumped, I suppose I could make a request at Wikipedia:WikiProject Resource Exchange/Resource Request if it's needed? Mujinga (talk) 19:41, 19 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
ODNB says "Her work was initially more widely known than her husband's, a position that was reversed with the progressive enhancement of his status." Mujinga (talk) 10:42, 20 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
Lists her occupation as artist, but the article itself suggests that that was the least important of her professions. Please could you change her occupation to more accurately reflect the Career section of the article?
done Mujinga (talk) 16:00, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
The "Other names" section only includes 2 of the 4 alternative names given in the lead.
The rest are present in other bits of the box Mujinga (talk) 16:00, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Thanks, I need to pay more attention! Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 11:54, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
Gallery
I'm a bit unsure whether this section is needed at all - it may not be with some manoeuvring of the images. As per WP:GALLERY, a gallery should be used if there are a collection of images which cannot be adequately explained by text. I think the title page of In the Alsatian Mountains and cover of When Fortune Frowns aren't necessarily needed, as the books are already described in the article. The illustration from In the Alsatian Mountains, however, is more relevant as it both represents the books and Jenner's work as illustrator. Similarly, I think the illustration from In London Town adds value to the article as it shows an earlier example of Jenner's art. Could those be included in the Career section of the article, maybe in a side-by-side smaller gallery if there isn't loads of room? Do let me know if you disagree with this idea.
My rationale would be the other way around: since it's a rather short article I would like to have the images present but there isn't enough text about her books to have the images on the rightside. Therefore the gallery provides a better display of her works and also as you mentioned her illustrations Mujinga (talk) 16:21, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
No problem. I that case, I'd make it more obvious in the image captions or in some prose that the illustrations are by Jenner. Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 11:54, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
And as an aside, In London Town isn't mentioned anywhere in the article, so you might want to clarify what it is.
Since the full title given is In London Town: A novel (Volume 3) (1884) it seems self-explanatory Mujinga (talk) 16:00, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Could you also add "by Jenner" in the description, just so people are aware she wrote it as well Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 11:54, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
I don't think Jenner's death is significant enough to warrant its own section. Could Career maybe instead be Career and later life, and incorporate the para currently in Death? Let me know what you think.
I've used the guidance in the past before, so no problem! Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 11:54, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
Words to watch
Erring on the side of caution, I'd change The Times review remarking to something like a review in The Times wrote.
I don't necessarily see a problem with "remarking" but perhaps I misunderstood. In any case, switched to "commenting" Mujinga (talk) 16:00, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Thanks, it's very cautious on my part so feel free to change back if you prefer the former :) Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 11:54, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
Commenting reads better so it's good you flagged it! Mujinga (talk) 19:41, 19 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
Sources and references provided in the appropriate section of article.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
Source spot check
The Times (June 10, 1895) Y
The Times (March 21, 1895) Y
gorsedhkernow.org.uk
In the article it says ten Cornish people were initiated as bards at a Gorsedd at Treorchy, but the source calls it Gorsedh - is this just an alternative spelling?
It seems gorsedd is the general term and gorsedh is the cornish spelling Mujinga (talk) 16:04, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
In the 1900s, Jenner published three works on the use of symbols in Christianity. Can't find anything to back this up in the source specified?
Are you able to check p225? Sadly it's unavailable to me via google books? If it's not there, I agree we'll need another citation Mujinga (talk) 16:30, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Yep I've checked. The source only seems to back up the following sentence about D. H. Lawrence. Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 11:54, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
Thanks for checking, it's annoying how i was able to use the googlebooks and now I don't have access to that page. I'm pretty sure that the previous sentence would be backed up by the ODNB article and I've tried finding another citation without success. So I will make a resource request. That's exciting, I've never done that before! Mujinga (talk) 19:41, 19 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
Unfortunately I can't access the Oxford Dictionary of National Biography at the moment, where I'm sure the majority of information about Jenner resides. However, I'm satisfied from reading the other sources that the main aspects of Jenner's life are covered here.
It's available through the wikipedia library which is a superuseful resource! Mujinga (talk) 16:04, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Having said that, right now I'm logged in but the Henry Jenner article is still locked, strange Mujinga (talk) 16:21, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Aargh that's awful, I hope it gets resolved soon. Thanks for the link, I thought it must be a problem at my end. Mujinga (talk) 19:25, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
If there is anything more about her career as an artist, maybe add a couple of extra lines as there isn't a lot of coverage in the article at the moment.
Sadly there isn't much more I don't think. Although I can't check the ODNB entry right now but of course that is for her husband anyway Mujinga (talk) 17:34, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Just to add here having read the ODNB again, it's just two paragraphs on her so not much more to say Mujinga (talk) 10:43, 20 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
Focus is good, no unnecessary detail.
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
Topic is presented neutrally.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
All recent edits are constructive. Majority of edits are constructive and by the nominator.
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Does the infobox image need a Template:PD-UK-unknown tag instead of EU?
I'm not sure! But I've added the PD-UK-unknown tag Mujinga (talk) 17:34, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
Just checking because the EU tag states "For a work made available to the public in the United Kingdom, please use Template:PD-UK-unknown instead." As it was taken in Truro, I'm guessing it was available in the UK. I've also added the web page from which the photo was taken to the image file for further accountability. Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 11:54, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
File:205 of 'In London Town. A novel. By Katharine Lee' (11089577835).jpg needs a Public Domain copyright tag.
Image licensing is not an area of expertise for me, but I have added some more tagsMujinga (talk) 17:34, September 18, 2022 (UTC)
It's not my area of expertise either, so apologies! However, I do think the UK tag isn't relevant as we do know who the author is (Jenner). In that case, we are presumably dealing with lifetime+70 years. I've added a relevant tag. Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 11:54, September 19, 2022 (UTC)
Yes I was a bit unsure on what tag to use and that's much better, thanks Mujinga (talk) 20:28, 19 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
See comment above in criterion 1b regarding Gallery section.
7. Overall assessment.
@Mujinga Just had a final read through and it all looks good. Thank you for persisting with the sources. Very happy to pass the article! Unexpectedlydian♯4talk‽ 20:58, 22 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
Ah, nice. Thanks for the careful review! Mujinga (talk) 21:22, 22 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
