Talk:James D. Ramage/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Ed! in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 15:55, 7 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • I think you could just remove the first sentence of the lead, " is a significant figure in the history of U.S. naval aviation. " as it sounds like editorializing and doesn't strongly establish his notability as the second sentence does. Try: "James D. "Jig Dog" Ramage (19 July 1916 – 21 July 2012) was a combat leader in World War II and a major factor in putting nuclear-capable aircraft aboard aircraft carriers. Before retirement he attained the rank of rear admiral."
  • "Japanese aircraft carrier Ryūhō" needs to be appropriately italicized in the lead, and again in the World War II section.
  • Flag officer should be linked in the last para of the lead.
  • "Only one Enterprise plane was lost in combat, although five more were lost operationally." -- It might be helpful to clarify what you mean by "operationally."
  • CINCPAC should be spelled out on first reference, and abbreviated after.
  • Any explination as to why the Jig Dog Ramage Award was discontinued after 2009?
  • Dup links tool returns one result: aircraft carrier. Dab links and external links return no problems.
  • There are no apparent issues with stability. The article is also amply illustrated by properly lisenced illustration.
Placing the article on hold pending fixes. —Ed!(talk) 16:11, 7 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

I think the award missing one year is fine for GA. Passing the article now. —Ed!(talk) 19:30, 11 January 2013 (UTC)Reply