Talk:Jacob deGrom/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 22:52, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

Six months is long enough to wait for a review, no? Wizardman 22:52, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

I had thought so, but wasn't going to bring it up. Thanks for taking it on. – Muboshgu (talk) 23:35, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

Not gonna lie, it took me until about halfway through the article before I noticed his name was "deGrom" rather than "DeGrom". I never noticed that until now. Anyway, here are the issues I found:

• Ref #33 (now at http://sports.yahoo.com/news/murphy-mets-beat-sleeping-dodgers-3-2-reach-032308506--mlb.html) needs publisher and date.

YDone. Ikhtiar H (talk) 09:12, 15 January 2016 (UTC)

• The second part of amateur career reads a little stilted, i.e. "He did X. He did Y. He did Z." I'd at least combine a couple of the sentences to make it flow a little better.

YDone. Ikhtiar H (talk) 09:17, 15 January 2016 (UTC)

• Did the Mets draft him as a pitcher or shortstop? Given his split before being drafted it might be worth noting.

YDone. Noted as a pitcher. Ikhtiar H (talk) 09:23, 15 January 2016 (UTC)

• "where he made six starts,[6][10] before he" rm comma

YDone. Ikhtiar H (talk) 09:30, 15 January 2016 (UTC)

• " to the major leagues, and traded" rm comma

YDone. Ikhtiar H (talk) 09:30, 15 January 2016 (UTC)

• Nitpicking, but 2015 jumps right into June; did nothing noteworthy happen in April or May?

No significant contributions. Ikhtiar H (talk) 09:44, 15 January 2016 (UTC)

• "and a 2.54 ERA and a 0.99 WHIP " double "and a" in the sentence; fix the run-on.

YDone. Ikhtiar H (talk) 09:48, 15 January 2016 (UTC)

• This one's hard to explain, but the last two sentence in 2015 feel like they're in a vacuum, given that they're mentioning an NLCS game and World Series game independent both of each other and the rest of the article. Reword if you can just to make his postseason story flow better.

Everything else necessary in a good article is present, so I'll put the article on hold and pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman 02:00, 9 January 2016 (UTC)

Great. I'll start working on this shortly. – Muboshgu (talk) 00:12, 13 January 2016 (UTC)

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman 15:52, 16 January 2016 (UTC)

Oh. Okay. Thanks, Ikhtiar H. I was just ready to get to this now, so imagine my surprise. – Muboshgu (talk) 18:07, 16 January 2016 (UTC)