Talk:Hurricane Paula/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by 12george1 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 04:17, 6 December 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • "from an low pressure area " - were you going for something else here?
  • That was originally "area of low pressure", hence the "an".--12george1 (talk) 05:02, 6 December 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "with the storm peaking with" - avoid too many "with"s
  • "After convection appeared to increase again" - why "appeared"?
  • Link SSHS somewhere
  • "The National Hurricane Center noted that wind shear would increase during "the next day or so", which would "only allow small strengthening"" - why is this important?
  • "Hurricane-force winds extended only 25 miles (40 km) from the center of Paula, while tropical storm-force winds extended 70 miles (110 km) from the same point" - wouldn't this be more useful at the peak?
  • Not sure if it was actually at the peak, but I will move it there.--12george1 (talk) 05:02, 6 December 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • You mention Nicaragua impact in the infobox, but don't say any. Why? Did you check WMO?
  • I did check WMO, but found nothing. I searched elsewhere and all I found was heavy rainfall.--12george1 (talk) 05:02, 6 December 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Puerto Lempira Airport - link?
  • "locals in the region stated that the winds were stronger than those produced by Hurricane Mitch in 1998" - specifying the region would be helpful here, since Mitch affected the whole country
  • "waves up to 7 ft (2.1 m) pounded beaches, leading to fears of additional flooding" - did they actually cause flooding though?
  • "most of which were in Cancún" - when you refer to people, use "whom", not "which"
  • [1] - waterspouts in the Florida Keys

All in all, good job! --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:17, 6 December 2013 (UTC)Reply