Talk:Hurricane Martha/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 17:36, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

Hello again George! I will be reviewing Martha. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 17:36, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

Lead

• "... reported in the impacts countries." → impacts → impacted

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 21:31, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

• "Agricultural land was flooded in Almirante, Bocas del Toro and inundated streets and low-lying areas in Puerto Armuelles, Chiriquí." You don't provide the substance (rain!) that inundated streets in low-lying areas. From what I read, agricultural land inundated streets. You could instead say, "Agricultural land was flooded in Almirante, Bocas del Toro and streets became inundated in low-lying areas of Puerto Armuelles, Chiriquí."

• Fixed, though notice I did mention rain in the previous sentence.--12george1 (talk) 21:31, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

• "...5 deaths were reported." → "...five deaths were reported."

• But I consistently write the numbers numerically, why should I suddenly spell-it out now?--12george1 (talk) 21:31, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

Meteorological history

• "According to the Best Track..." Instead of calling it just 'best track,' maybe you could say HURDAT?

• Well, there hasn't been a re-analysis by HURDAT yet.--12george1 (talk) 21:31, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

• "...tropical cyclone attained a maximum sustained winds..." No need to have the article 'a.'

• Fixed; I actually meant to say "a maximum sustain wind speed..."--12george1 (talk) 21:31, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

• "...pressure of 980 mbar (29 inHg)^[5] though it was later..." You need a comma before the reference.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 21:31, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

• "Operationally, winds were thought to be only 50 mph (85 km/h)..." So, did it change? If it still is 50 mph, there's no need to say operationally.

• Yes it changed, since the post season analysis shows that it was actually 20 mph stronger than in real-time; Martha made landfall with winds of 70 mph (110 km/h).--12george1 (talk) 21:31, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

Preparations and impact

• "...pertained to tides in the Gulf of Mosquitoes." → Change GOM to Mosquito Gulf and link to Golfo de los Mosquitos.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 21:31, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

• "...of agriculture land..." → "...of agricultural land..."

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 21:31, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

• "...capital city of San Jose." You need an é.

• Réally?--12george1 (talk) 21:31, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

That's all I have for this review. Once the issues are fixed, I'll pass. Nice work! TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 17:36, 4 January 2013 (UTC)