Talk:Hurricane Leslie (2012)/GA1
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 16:41, 27 February 2013 (UTC)
- "The twelfth tropical cyclone and twelfth named storm" - get rid of one
- "caused hundreds of power outages and felled tree branches" - unclear whether "felled" is an adjective or a verb. I'd use "knocked down" so it's clearer, given the rest of the sentence.
- " caused Leslie to re-curve to the west-northwest" - recurve usually means moving to the northeast, so I don't think it works here.
- "However, intensification halted later on August 31, as wind shear increased over the storm - rm comma
- "with the circulation being displaced " - rm "being"
- "Relentless caused Leslie" - did it?
- 5 mph (8.0 km/h)" - unit?
- "the storm's circulation expanded to a radius of more than 1,150 miles (1,850 km); the wind field also expanded" - the difference between circulation and wind field is ambiguous
- "By early on September 9, the blocking pattern diminished" - how?
- " than initially predicted, causing less than anticipated impact."
- Impact in Nova Scotia?
All in all pretty good. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:41, 27 February 2013 (UTC)