Talk:Hurricane Gladys (1975)/GA1
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 01:55, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
- Mention SSHS in the lead when you say C1
- Done--12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
- You mention low wind shear and warm waters in the lede that allowed for strengthening, but that's not in the MH. Why not?
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
- "It became one of the few hurricane to be seen on radar over 150 mi (240 km) from the continental United States." - clarify at the time, since radar might have changed since then
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
- "Thereafter, the storm weakened slightly, and was downgraded into a Category 3 hurricane." - when?
- September 20, 1673 :P --12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
- The lede says Gladys merged with a large ET, but the MH doesn't mention the size. How come?
- Hmm, I guess size does matter :P --12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
- "for the now defunct" - add dash between now and defunct
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
- "Although initially expected to not threaten land,[6] when Gladys neared the East Coast of the United States, meteorologists at the NHC forecast the storm to make landfall within three days;[7] a hurricane watch was issued for North Carolina's Outer Banks,[8] extending from Cape Lookout to Kitty Hawk." - this could be split into two sentences. The first one should be reorganized, as the structure isn't the most concise.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
- Anything else about the waves? IMO, the bit about the waves in NC should be moved to the preps paragraph, where you already mention the fishermen defying warnings.
- Unfortunately, there wasn't anything more. But I did fix the second part, I think-12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
- "Despite warnings to fishermen, 40 of them went to Cape Point near Cape Hatteras due to the "increased feeding activities" of fish during rough seas." - I'd change "them" to fishermen", and just start off with "Despite warnings,"
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:31, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
- [1] - there isn't much here, but there is a bit more Canada impact
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)
All in all, it's pretty good. This shouldn't take too long to do. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:55, 3 June 2014 (UTC)