Talk:Hudson Volcano/GA1

Latest comment: 8 months ago by Bruxton in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 21:16, 3 February 2024 (UTC)Reply


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I am happy to review this article. I do enjoy articles on Geography. Bruxton (talk) 21:16, 3 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
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Lead

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 Y all of the elements of the lead are repeated and cited in the article.
 Y One question regarding years. Some years use this format "7,750 BP" and some in the body use "7750 BP". It is inconsistent with others as well. Wondering if it is a mistake?
Aye, it's a mistake, standardized. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:16, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply

Spelling/other

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 Y Lead "neighbouring" are we using British English?
 Y Geography and geomorphology "Another name is Cerro de los Ventisqueros" perhaps "another name for the volcano"?
 Y Geography and geomorphology - "Mount Hudson lies in Andes of southern Chile: Missing "the"?
 Y Geography and geomorphology - "Farther south is the 350 kilometres (220 mi) long" "how about "farther south there is a"
 Y Geography and geomorphology "From north to south they are the" consider a comma after "south,"
I don't think that's needed. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:16, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y Geography and geomorphology "The Huemules Glacier is the largest glacier of Mount Hudson, being 11 kilometres (6.8 mi) long," instead of "being" consider "at"?
I think "being" is fine here. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:16, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y Geography and geomorphology More British spelling "kilometres" consider placing the British english notice
 Y Geography and geomorphology Does "well defined". need a hyphen?
 Y Geography and geomorphology "clockwise from north to south" consider a comma "south,"
I don't think that's necessary here. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:16, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y Geography and geomorphology Should river be capitalized in this context? "Huemules river" it occurs twice in the paragraph.
Capitalized Huemules River. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:16, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y Geography and geomorphology "but by 1979 had built back up again" consider "it had built up again"
 Y Geology "made up by intrusive rocks" perhaps "made up of"?
 Y Geology "except for the AVZ, where the Antarctic Plate subducts instead" is "instead needed?
Not sure, so removed it. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:16, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y Composition and magma plumbing system "Rocks contain only few" Should we add "a" before few?
 Y Composition and magma plumbing system "The cone lavas includie MORB" misspelling of "include"
 Y Holocene "Pre-caldera outcrops are rate and consist of breccias formed by hyaloclastite" Did you want the word "rate" there?
 Y Holocene "northeastern and southern side of the caldera" Should it be "sides"?
 Y Holocene "occurred 8010 BC" Should we add "in" 8010?
 Y H0 eruption: 17,300-17,440 BP "and like the 1991 AD eruption includes two distinct chemistries" should it be "it included"
 Y Impact on Tierra del Fuego "Impact on human populations in Tierra del Fuego" Should we precede the sentence with the word "The"?
No, in headers I don't think we need it. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:16, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y Impact on Tierra del Fuego "Vertebrates were decimated and large mammals wiped out" should be "were" wiped out.
I dunno, I think the previous "were" carries this sentence. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:16, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y Impact on Tierra del Fuego "relied on coastal foodsources" food sources" should be two words
 Y H2 eruption: 4200 BP "Unlike the H1 and H3 eruption" should be "eruptions"
 Y H3 eruption: 1991 AD "On August 12, a Plinian eruption formed a 800 metres" is there a mistake before 800 meters?
No, why? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:16, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y H3 eruption: 1991 AD "caldera ice and flowed down the Huemules river" Capitalize "River"
 Y H3 eruption: 1991 AD "and people reported problems with breating and eyesight" spelling of "breathing"
 Y Intercontinental spread of ash "arriving there in December,[155] ice cores of East Antarctica" should it be "in" ice cores?
 Y Intercontinental spread of ash "The 1991 eruption of Hudson took place in the same year with the 1991 eruption of Mount Pinatubo." should it be "Same year as the 1991"?
 Y Other historical activity "On the morning of August 12 1971" might follow 1971 with a comma?
 Y Other historical activity Other historical activity "Huemules river" capitalize River - occurs twice in the paragraph
 Y Hazards "However, as of 2023 the municipal planning of the municipalities on the Chilean side close to the volcano largely ignore volcanic hazards." should it be "ignores"?
Done except as commented. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:16, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply

Images

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 Y only one image but it is licensed. It is clear and interesting.

Citations

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 Y Earwig 8.8% only alerts to long titles.
 Y Geography and geomorphology - it is a difficult check for me because of the language and need to machine translate the foreign language sources. The citations I could check in this section were accurate.
I've seen a recommendation to use this translator, as it's less likely to wank up the syntax than Google Translate. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 16:55, 4 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y Geology "The crust under the volcano is about 30 kilometres (19 mi) thick" Not finding this in the citation #41. Other sources that I spot checked are good.
Hudson volcano has developed on *30-km-thick crust Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:40, 5 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y Composition and magma plumbing system citations check out
 Y Climate and vegetation citations check out
 Y Eruption history - spot checked - citations check out
 Y Holocene - spot checked -citations check out
 Y Significant eruptions and recent activity - spot checked -citations check out
 Y H0 eruption: 17,300-17,440 BP - spot checked - citations check out
 Y H1 eruption: 7750 BP - spot checked - citations check out
 Y Impact on Tierra del Fuego - spot checked - citations check out
 Y H2 eruption: 4200 BP Is the first sentence is WP:OVERCITEed? Also should we follow MOS:SPELL09? If so the number 6 should be "six"? I have not checked the rest of the article for 0-9 numbers which are not spelled.
I don't remember why all these citations, but the information in the sentence comes from different sources. I've spelled out six there. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:40, 5 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 Y H3 eruption: 1991 AD - spot checked - citations check out
 Y Intercontinental spread of ash - spot checked - citations check out
 Y Other historical activity - spot checked - citations check out
 Y Hazards - spot checked - citations check out

Comments

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@Jo-Jo Eumerus:, I am sure the article took an enormous amount of time. It is comprehensive and I have not been able to access certain references but I can AGF. You have brought it from this 678 word article to a 4445 word article. You have an impressive body of work. I think we can wrap this up when you have a look at my final concerns. Bruxton (talk) 01:09, 5 February 2024 (UTC)Reply

Chart

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Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. Yes
  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. Yes
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. Yes
  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). Yes
  2c. it contains no original research. Yes
  2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. Yes
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. Yes
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). Yes
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. Yes
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. Yes
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. Yes
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Yes
  7. Overall assessment.
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