Article needs cleanup, possibly attention from an expert.

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This article was not written in great English. The writer seems to have made too much of an effort to sound formal and just made the page difficult to read with obtuse sentence constructions, disjointed sentences that don't seem to flow in proper order, and vocabulary like "thus" where unnecessary, "proved" where "showed" or nothing at all would be more appropriate, and the like. I have done some cleanup, but I am neither an expert in Egyptology nor an expert Wikipedian, so I am afraid that I might damage the informational content of the article if I do anything more comprehensive. If you are qualified to do so, please clean up this article. Mattwillmarron (talk) 07:55, 29 September 2016 (UTC)Reply

Should rulers be referred to as "kings" or "pharaohs"?

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This article calls almost all of the rulers it refers to "kings." I haven't seen an article on Ancient Egypt do this before, and would change it, but I don't know enough to sort the proto/pre-dynastic kings from the proper dynastic pharaohs. Help? Mattwillmarron (talk) 07:59, 29 September 2016 (UTC)Reply