Talk:Heather Bresch/GA1
Latest comment: 8 years ago by LavaBaron in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: LavaBaron (talk · contribs) 20:45, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
1. Reasonably well-written? 
- please rewrite this sentence: The university subsequently awarded her an MBA despite her not having attained sufficient credits (22 out of the required 48). thusly: The university subsequently awarded her an MBA despite the fact she only completed 22 out of the required 48 credits for the degree.
- This is another one of those I should not do myself, since it is in a controversial area and I have a COI. Just a fair warning, this page has also experienced a lot of drama, which unfortunately tends to follow COI disclosures. Like @Prhartcom: I want to encourage you to do more reviews, as there are many noms that require reviewing; it just may not be great for your mental health to do these ones, through no fault of my own ;-) Well, part of it is the nature of my work sometimes draws me to articles that have been victimized by POV pushers, but also drama-mongering tends to follow COI disclosures. CorporateM (Talk) 21:44, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- I acknowledge, and decline, your request I not conduct GA reviews on your work. My "mental health" is just fine. As for the recommended edit, this is a style preference and does not deter from GA status so awarding GA will continue regardless of whether the edit is made.LavaBaron (talk) 22:16, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- I wasn't really asking you not to per se - on the contrary it takes forever and a day to get a reviewer and I'm happy to finally get one - just advising that it will contribute to escalating frustration. My mental health of course must be derelict for me to choose such a hostile place as Wikipedia for my place of work ;-) CorporateM (Talk) 22:26, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- (talk page stalker) Hey, I just read this article yesterday! Nice job on it as always, CorporateM. Nice job LavaBaron for jumping on a new GAR so quickly. Prhartcom (talk) 22:32, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- My frustration can't be escalated as I'm not currently frustrated. LavaBaron (talk) 22:48, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- Then you are more patient than me! Sorry for de-railing the GA review. Please proceed! CorporateM (Talk) 22:50, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- I wasn't really asking you not to per se - on the contrary it takes forever and a day to get a reviewer and I'm happy to finally get one - just advising that it will contribute to escalating frustration. My mental health of course must be derelict for me to choose such a hostile place as Wikipedia for my place of work ;-) CorporateM (Talk) 22:26, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- I acknowledge, and decline, your request I not conduct GA reviews on your work. My "mental health" is just fine. As for the recommended edit, this is a style preference and does not deter from GA status so awarding GA will continue regardless of whether the edit is made.LavaBaron (talk) 22:16, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- This is another one of those I should not do myself, since it is in a controversial area and I have a COI. Just a fair warning, this page has also experienced a lot of drama, which unfortunately tends to follow COI disclosures. Like @Prhartcom: I want to encourage you to do more reviews, as there are many noms that require reviewing; it just may not be great for your mental health to do these ones, through no fault of my own ;-) Well, part of it is the nature of my work sometimes draws me to articles that have been victimized by POV pushers, but also drama-mongering tends to follow COI disclosures. CorporateM (Talk) 21:44, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- please rewrite this sentence: Soon afterwards, the company offered her a low-level position in the quality control department of a factory in Morgantown. thusly: The company soon thereafter offered her a low-level position in the quality control department of a factory in Morgantown.
Done CorporateM (Talk) 21:37, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- "US" and "U.S." are used interchangeably to refer to the United States ... please pick one as per MOS:U.S.
- Done CorporateM (Talk) 21:35, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
2. Factually accurate?
- could not find a source for DOB
- Done I could not find a source for it either. It looks like it was added recently; not sure where the date came from or who added it. CorporateM (Talk) 21:34, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- "She had misgivings" should be "According to Bresh, she had misgivings ..."
- Done CorporateM (Talk) 21:28, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- the quote "absolutely accept" is not supported by the citation; according to it, her father said Bresch should "absolutely take it"
- Done CorporateM (Talk) 21:21, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- I could not find confirmation Bresch had four children in the sources listed
- This source says "the time she dedicates to her four children" on page 3 and is cited at the end of that sentence. CorporateM (Talk) 21:19, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
3. Broad in coverage? 
- FYI, there are a couple straggling items discussed here and here that just never got taken care of, just out of lack of consensus or general inaction, that would be worth taking a look at. CorporateM (Talk) 21:24, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- I saw them and my judgment is incorporation is not possible while remaining compliant with WP:SUMMARY which is one of the tests for this criteria point. LavaBaron (talk) 22:16, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
- FYI, there are a couple straggling items discussed here and here that just never got taken care of, just out of lack of consensus or general inaction, that would be worth taking a look at. CorporateM (Talk) 21:24, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
4. NPOV?
- Yes, though, I was concerned there is no mention about the breach of fiduciary duties suit currently being made against Bresch. Insofar as I can tell, however, it hasn't received sufficient coverage to warrant inclusion so that's all fine.
5. Stable?
- There have been a handful of incidental edits recently that do not impact the article's general stability.
6. Images?