Talk:Hasan al-Kharrat/GA1
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Reviewer: Hchc2009 (talk · contribs) 10:05, 11 May 2013 (UTC)
I'll read through properly later and begin the review then. Looks interesting! Hchc2009 (talk) 10:05, 11 May 2013 (UTC)
- Well written and researched. Some minor prose points below, apart from that it's good to go. Hchc2009 (talk) 09:50, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
- All done - will pass in a moment. Many thanks for an excellent article! Hchc2009 (talk) 17:26, 14 May 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking the time to review it ;) Cheers! --Al Ameer son (talk) 01:15, 15 May 2013 (UTC)
- All done - will pass in a moment. Many thanks for an excellent article! Hchc2009 (talk) 17:26, 14 May 2013 (UTC)
Well-written:
(a) the prose is clear and concise, respects copyright laws, and the spelling and grammar are correct;
- "After withdrawing from Damascus, which was severely bombarded by French forces, al-Kharrat would continue to lead forays against French positions in and around Damascus until being killed in a French ambush in the Ghouta." - "al-Kharrat continued to lead" would put it in the active form.
- "Because of his efforts against French rule and his death in that struggle, al-Kharrat is considered a hero by Syrians until the present day." - I'd advise against beginning a sentence with "Because..." - "Due to his efforts..."?
- "Al-Kharrat would eventually serve as the night watchman" - it is unclear from this when he served as the night watchman.
- "In the mid-summer of 1925 Sultan Pasha al-Atrash rallied his Druze fighters and launched a revolt against French rule in Jabal al-Arab after three other prominent Druze leaders were invited to Damascus only to be imprisoned by the French authorities." A long sentence - worth breaking in two.
- "Because of the diversity and independence of the various rebel factions, centralized order and oversight was difficult to establish. " - again, I'd caution against starting with because. "Centralized order and oversight were difficult to establish because of the diversity and independence of the various rebel factions."?
- " His men would continue to fight the French for the remainder of the revolt" - "His men continued to fight..."
- "Al-Kharrat and his son Fakhri are still considered a "martyred heroes" among Syrians " - "still considered "martyred heroes".
- Done. For the most part at least. The sources I've been able to access do not appear to include the year he started his role as a night watchman, but Provence indicates he continued until his participation in the revolt in late 1925, which I noted in the article. Otherwise, I think I've addressed the rest of the prose issues completely. --Al Ameer son (talk) 16:34, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
(b) it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
Factually accurate and verifiable:
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(c) it contains no original research.
Broad in its coverage:
(a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic;
(b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias, giving due weight to each.
Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
Illustrated, if possible, by images:
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