Talk:Harry Crerar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 01:49, 18 October 2021 (UTC)

Will review this week. Hog Farm _Talk 01:49, 18 October 2021 (UTC)

I made several copy edits, revert anything you don't agree with

• "During the The Second World War" - duplicate the

  Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

• "Vienna to study the manufacture of Incandescent light bulbs." - I'm not sure that Incandescent should be capitalized

  Y Decapitated. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

• "SORA) by Major Don A, White" - is the comma intentional

  Y No just my lousy typing. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

• "First Canadian Army became operational Normandy at noon on 23 July" - missing a word?

  Y Added missing word. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

• "Crerar immediately clashed his Crocker" - ?

  Y Changed to "with". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

• "the Crocker and the commander of the British Second Army" - ?

  Y Deleted "the". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

• " Keller was seriously wounded in an attack by American bombers on 8 August, and was succeeded by Major-General Daniel Spry ten days later." - Surely if it was the Americans, it would have been an accident, so attack seems like a weird word choice

  Y Deleted "in an attack". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

• Order of Leopold seems to only be in infobox, as do the two Croix de Guerres, the Order of the White Lion, and the Order of Kutuzov

  Y Couldn't find the Order of Kutuzov. It's supposed to have been gazetted on 4 October 1945, but the Canada Gazette is not available online, and it isn't in his medals list. So removed that one for now. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

• "Croix Croix de Guerre 1940 with Palm (Belgium)" - Is the double Croix intentional?

  Y Mais non. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

• Sourcing looks good.

Placing on hold. Hog Farm _Talk 03:15, 20 October 2021 (UTC)

All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)