Talk:Habits (Stay High)/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 22:44, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Review of this coming very soon. I saw we're kinda brothers—my GAN is the oldest in the Songs category, and yours is second Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:44, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• is a song by → is a song recorded by  Done
• from her debut studio album → for her debut extended play  Done
• unlink "extended play" here  Done
• Jerlström and produced → Jerlström, while produced (word repetition through "and")  Done
• After Lo was signed → However, Lo was signed
• Its lyrics detail → Its lyrics delve on
• previous significant other → I think we know it's a boyfriend, don't we? If not, use 'suitor'
• well received → well-recived
• Link 'music critics' to music journalism
• who commended → I think "acclaimed" would fir better here
• It peaked at number three → The recording peaked at number three (to avoid word repetition)
• in the country → in that territory
• The song topped → Additionally, the track topped
• in a tea party → at a tea party
• Hangout Music Festival and → set comma before "and"
• It was awarded → The single was awarded (word repetition)
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• Add alternative text for the covers
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Background and release

• Jerlström and produced → Jerlström, while produced
• Remove comma before "under the production name"
• Lo went to stay → Lo went on to stay
• she announced on her Facebook account → she announced through her Facebook account
• The singer tried to re-record the vocals, but she decided to keep the demo because "it was really coming from the heart" → you haven't mentioned before that she recorded a demo, thus this is confusing.  Comment: I changed the sentence to "The singer decided to use the vocals she recorded for the demo on the song because her vocal performance "was really coming from the heart"."
• track and played the → track, and additionally played the
• while Lars Norgren mixed the song and Björn Engelmann mastered it. → with Lars Norgren mixing the song and Björn Engelmann mastering it.
• Lo said that "[While → Lo said that; "[While
• song's artwork with the caption "soon" → song's artwork accompanied by the statement "soon"
• after "Love Ballad" → set year of release in brackets
• The song was re-released → Subsequently, the recording was re-released
• 6 December 2013, through Universal Music → remove comma here
• It was digitally released → It was made available for digital consumption (word repetition)
• in the US → spell US out
• that, "I released → that; "I released
  • Everything has been  Done. --Paparazzzi (talk) 08:05, 5 November 2016 (UTC)

Composition and inspiration

• pain;[33] she said, "I can't lie. → pain.[33] Echoing this thought, Lo further confessed that; "I can't lie
• Lo indicated that, following the narrative of the EP → Other way round
• It was also → The recording was also
• section on Lo's debut → section of Lo's debut
• it is composed → the song is composed (it's never good to start a new para with 'it')
• and has a dance pop tempo → with it having a dance-pop tempo
• Some critics → link to music journalism
• production. Carrie Battan → production; Carrie Battan
• sweeping chorus" but noted → set comma before "but"
• All Things Go → this is italicized in the citation; please fix here also
• stated that, "I love → stated that; "I love
• song's lyrics addres → song's lyrics delve
• drug abuse: "You're → drug abuse; "You're
• Lo sings about "knowing → Lo approaches the theme of "knowing (word repetition)
• are": "Staying → are"; "Staying
  • Everything has been  Done. --Paparazzzi (talk) 08:05, 5 November 2016 (UTC)

Critical reception

• well received → well-received
• pop songs I've heard → pop songs [she has] heard
• Carrie Battam wrote → You've already used "wrote" in the anterior sentence
• On her review → In her review
• it was perhaps a "sad" and "depressing" song, it was "so fun to listen to" → use present tense
• add release year of "Chandelier" in brackets
• that: "'Habits' → that; "'Habits'
• However, not all the critics gave positive reviews → This sentence can be removed; it is enough if you just start a new paragraph
• She also stated that: "The part → She further stated that; "The part
  • Everything has been  Done. --Paparazzzi (talk) 08:06, 5 November 2016 (UTC)

Recognition and accolades

• Rolling Stone ranked "Habits (Stay High)" → you've already mentioned the song's name, so change here to "the recording"
• twenty-three → 23
• Also, Chris → Echoing this thought, Chris
• and said that: "For a → and confessed that; "For a
• You should mention that the Grammis is Swedish
• most performed songs → I think you want to say that it was one of the most-played songs (...on the radio)?  Comment: I don't really know what they mean with "performed" (since that's the name of the award), but I guess they are refering to how often a song is played on radio, television, streaming media, but I have not found anything from realiable sources that confirm what I'm saying
• It was also one of the songs decorated with → The single was further awarded with
• the song received a nomination for the Best Lyrics → change song with the song's name due to word repetition
• Add year of release of "Blank Space" in brackets
  • Besides the comment above, everything has been  Done. --Paparazzzi (talk) 08:16, 5 November 2016 (UTC)

Commercial performance

• on the chart, the song peaked at number three → you've already said "song" in the anterior sentence
• It topped the chart on the issue dated 15 November 2014 → Additionally, "Habits (Stay High)"...
• to reach the number one in 2014 → to reach the number one spot in 2014
• It topped the chart for six consecutive weeks → The recording topped the chart for six consecutive weeks
• platinum → Platinum
• sixteen → 16
• where it reached the number three → remove "the"
• thirty-two → 32
• charted in some European countries → charted in various European countries
• fifty-three → 53
• platinum → Platinum
• in the country → in that territory
• the thirteenth best selling song → the thirteenth best-selling song
• in the region → in that region
• In Hungary, it peaked → In Hungary, the recording peaked
• Official Polish Airplay Chart → remove "Official"
• It also reached → It further reached
• chart.[103] It received a platinum certification by → chart, and received a Platinum certification accorded by
• certified gold → certified Gold
• on the digital singles chart of the Czech Republic → on the digital chart of Czech Republic
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Music videos

First version

• while the singer co-directed it and wrote the script → with the singer co-directing it and writing its script
• link YouTube to its respective article on Wikipedia
• as images of → including images of
• with the singer's memories from a hangover → with the singer recalling memories from a hangover
• screen. She walks into a bar to get a bottle of whiskey, and drinks with a man → screen, particularly getting a bottle of whiskey and drinking it with him.
• scene, she is seen in a tea party → scene, Lo is seen at a tea party
• At the end of the video, she is at home, vomiting into a sink. → The visual ends with the singer being at home while vomiting into a sink.
• Throughout the video are interspersed scenes of Lo → Scenes interspersed through the main plot portray Lo
• Image > Tove Lo in a tea party in the first music video for "Habits (Stay High)", which was described by a critic as "a genuine visual representation of the pain and behaviour behind the song". → Shot from the single's first music video, portraying Lo at a tea party. A critic described it as "a genuine visual representation of the pain and behavior behind the song".
• saying, "the → explaining that "the
• Scandipop described it as → Scandipop described the visual as (word repetition)
• received 529,932 views → received nearly 530,000 views
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Second version

• for three days → in the span of three days
• She explained: "When → She explained; "When
• days of the recording → days of the filming
• stall. She explained: "I was → stall; concerning this, the singer confessed that; "I was
• the music video was released on Lo's → the music video was released via Lo's
• channel on YouTube,[130] and the next day, it was released on the iTunes Store. → channel on YouTube, and was made available for consumption on the iTunes Store the next day.
• Then, she goes to the → Subsequently, she goes to the
• Throughout the video are interspersed scenes of Lo staring → Scenes interspersed through the main plot of the visual display Lo starring
• she lip syncs the lyrics → lip syncing the lyrics
• However, Sonya Mann → Remove "However"
• It was the → The clip was the
• most popular → post-popular
• It won the accolade → Additionally, it won the accolade
• There is no stating that she kissed a girl throughout the video. I think that's important; btw in the "see also" section, there is a link to 'media portrayals of bisexuality'.
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Live performances

• among others from Truth Serum → among other material from Truth Serum
• Lo performed "Habits (Stay High)" alongside the other songs → Lo also performed...
• Also, Michael → Echoing this thought, Michael
• 4 stars out of 5 → four stars out of five
• in UK → in the United Kingdom
• US TV → American television
• on US music TV show → on American music television show
• show and performed the track → show where she performed the track, as well.
• barefoot → do you mean stripped-down here (more acoustic)?  Comment: She was actually performing the song barefoot. I changed the sentence to "Lo performed "Habits (Stay High)" while barefoot on Jimmy Kimmel Live! to promote the release of Queen of the Clouds."
• Please look forward to not using "performed" every time here; try alternating with "sung" etc.
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Charts

• Year-end charts > German chart should be unlinked here
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Hippie Sabotage remix

• Lead is flawless :)

Background and release

• Sabotage posted the official → Sabotage posted the remix's official
• was later unavailable → was made unavailable
• It was released on 25 February → It was finally released on 25 February
• UK BBC Radio 1 → British BBC Radio 1
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Composition

• track with elements of chill-out and trap music. → track, incorporating elements of chill-out and trap music
• original track and reworked → original track, and reworked
• although he felt that → although feeling that
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Critical reception

• of I Am Music TV called it → of I Am Music TV labelled it
• Rafting stated that: "'Stay High' → Rafting stated that; "'Stay High'
• Also, Lewis Corner → Additionally, Lewis Corner
• Speech box > Tove Lo → Lo
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Commercial performance

• After that, it entered the top 100 singles chart on the iTunes Store. → which country?
• gold → Gold
• 400,000 sales → 400,000 units sold
• The remix debuted at number 16 → Additionally, the single opened at number 16
• 2014.[231] It peaked at number 13 and spent a total of 70 → 2014, and went on reaching position 13, with it spending a total of 70
• triple platinum → triple Platinum
• sales in the country and became → sales in that territory, and further became
• best selling → best-selling
• most played → most-played
• and held that position → and claimed that position
• best selling → highest-selling (word repetition)
• Official Finnish Airplay Chart → Remove "Official"
• gold → Gold
• seventh best selling song of 2014 in the country → seventh best-selling single of 2014 in that territory
• double-platinum → double Platinum
• on the chart.[248] It was certified platinum → on the chart, being eventually certified Platinum
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Promotion

Music video

• released on the iTunes Store → released onto the iTunes Store  Comment: Why "onto"?
• Ninja stated that: "Two → Ninja felt that; "Two
• Marina Cowell of Electric Sloth noted that the duo → Marina Cowell of Electric Sloth noted that the band (word repetition)
• Hippie Sabotage performed "Stay High" along their song "Your Soul" → Additionally, ...
• wrote that: "As Hippie → wrote that; "As Hippie
  • Besides the comment above, everything has been  Done.

Cover versions and other remixes

• posted his cover of the track with Madilyn Bailey on his YouTube channel. → premiered a cover version with Madilyn Bailey through the same platform.
• on their EP Angel Acoustic → Add the release year of the EP in brackets
• friend Paul Walker. In the background of the performance were projected images → friend Paul Walker; in the background of the performance images were projected
• Best Tour Covers. He also said → Best Tour Covers, further adding
• version of their remix were released → version of their remix was distributed (word repetition)
• duo FIXYN was released on the iTunes Store. → duo FIXYN was made vailable for consumption through the same platform
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

• Set full stops after the first three sentences.
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

References

• References number #31, #201, #215, #268 and #250 are dead + Others show issues. Please access the link and fix the issues, and find some archive urls for the dead links.
  • Everything has been  Done.--Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

Outcome

• Usually, when I review long articles like this I predict that the process is going to be tuff, but this was not the case. Most of the content just flowed. I've put this article  On hold for 7 days in order to allow edits. Best regards and good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:09, 3 November 2016 (UTC)
  • A question from an uninvolved editor: Cartoon network freak, did you check the citations to make sure that the cited sources actually support the assertions that are made in this article? Also, Paparazzzi, I didn't see any negative reviews in the sections that covered responses from critics. Were there any negative reviews? If yes, should these be included per WP:WEIGHT? Best, -- Notecardforfree (talk) 19:41, 4 November 2016 (UTC)
    • @Notecardforfree: I have not checked all of them (300!), but I have checked the most, thus also noticing some were dead (with the help of the machine, of course). Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:51, 4 November 2016 (UTC)
      • Cartoon network freak, thanks so much for the prompt reply and for the hard work you have done with this review. Per WP:GACR, you should check all the sources to make sure that they support the assertions made in this article. Also, it's important to explain in your review why each criteria is (or is not) satisfied. Best, -- Notecardforfree (talk) 20:21, 4 November 2016 (UTC)
• First of all, thank you Cartoon network freak for reviewing the article! Notecardforfree Yes, there are mixed and negative reviews from some critics; however, the amount of those responses does not compare to the amount of positive reviews that the song received, so that's why I did not mention that on the lead section. Honestly, it was hard to find mixed or negative review about this song, the ones that I found are on the second paragraph of the "Critical reception" section. --Paparazzzi (talk) 21:30, 4 November 2016 (UTC)
  • Thanks Paparazzzi; I like how you've written that section. Nice work. Best, -- Notecardforfree (talk) 21:46, 4 November 2016 (UTC)
• @Notecardforfree:: Thank you for your comments .
• @Cartoon network freak: I addressed all of your comments, with the exception of two that are mentioned above. Thank you so much for the review, I'm really grateful for that . Cheers, --Paparazzzi (talk) 01:31, 6 November 2016 (UTC)
  • @Notecardforfree:, @Paparazzzi: Gladly passing this article. Btw, I have checked the refs as suggested by Notecardforfree, and they all source what they have to source. Best regards to both, thank you Notecardforfree for contributing, and congrats Paparazzzi, Cartoon network freak (talk) 01:41, 6 November 2016 (UTC)

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