Talk:HMS Raider (1916)/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Simongraham in topic GA Review
GA Review
edit| GA toolbox |
|---|
| Reviewing |
Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch
Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 02:00, 9 February 2021 (UTC)
- Was the range 3,440 nmi or 3,450 nmi? One is provided in the infobox and the other in the body
- Great spot. That was a typo.
- The laid down date in the infobox is 25 October 1915, while only the less specific October 1915
- Updated. The infobox date comes from George Robinson and David Waller's excellent website.
- "After the Grand Fleet was disbanded, the ship was recommissioned with Reduced Complement on 20 November 1919" - Is it standard for "Reduced Complement" to be capitalized
- I am not sure so I have removed the phrase.
- "After the Grand Fleet was disbanded, the ship was recommissioned with Reduced Complement on 20 November 1919" - This implies that it was decommissioned at some point, but it isn't directly mentioned
- Good point. I have added another reference and changed the wording to remove the ambiguity.
- Image licensing looks fine.
- "The vessel remained part of the Fifteenth Destroyer Flotilla until the end of the war" - I'd recommend rephrasing this sentence, as the source only really confirms that the ship was still listed as part of the Fifteenth Destroyer Flotilla in July 1918.
- Good point. Intermediate copies of The Navy List also name Raider in the Flotilla, but it would not be efficient to list them all. I have reworded.
- Sources are all RS and formatting looks acceptable.
Looks good beyond the above, placing on hold. Hog Farm Talk 16:59, 9 February 2021 (UTC)
- @Hog Farm: Thank you for your comments and suggestions. simongraham (talk) 01:21, 10 February 2021 (UTC)
- @Simongraham: - I'm having concussion symptoms after a fall and it hurts to look at a screen. I'll give this another read through, it just may be a few days before symptoms clear up enough for me to do that though. Hog Farm Talk 01:36, 10 February 2021 (UTC)
- @Hog Farm:I am sorry to hear that. I hope you get well soon. simongraham (talk) 02:04, 10 February 2021 (UTC)
- @Simongraham: - I'm having concussion symptoms after a fall and it hurts to look at a screen. I'll give this another read through, it just may be a few days before symptoms clear up enough for me to do that though. Hog Farm Talk 01:36, 10 February 2021 (UTC)