Talk:HMS Pylades (1854)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 10:21, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 10:21, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

• British Empire, beam, and Kilowatt are duplicated links
  • Removed
• Article is stable
• Image correctly licensed
• Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

• "First-class" doesn't need a capital
  • Removed.
• Ibid "Admirals"
  • Removed.
• You're linking the wrong Michael de Courcy; this one died thirty years before Pylades was launched
  • Well noted. This one also seems not have achieved the rank of Admiral so I have amended the text.
• "led to the"
  • Added.
• Flag in class operators section is unnecessary
  • Removed.
• "1267" needs a comma
  • Added. And to other instances of similar numbers.
• Length between perpendiculars differs between main text and infobox
  • Corrected.

Design and development

• Link Royal Navy at first mention of "navy"
  • Added.
• "Pylades-class" no need for hyphen
  • Removed.
• bm needs linking
  • Added.
• You repeat "The engines", but there's only one?
  • Corrected and reworded to avoid the repeat.
• Link broadside
  • Added.
• Be consistent with numbers - you use "Ten" but "20"
  • Corrected per MOS:NUMERAL.

Construction and career

• at Sheerness Dockyard
  • Changed.
• for machinery
  • Changed.
• "after disappearing 18 days beforehand" this sounds interesting, do we have any more context?
  • Unfortunately the report has limited detail.
• "was the last Royal Navy to be deployed" missing word
  • Added.
• Pylades serving on three distinct stations in an eight month period is a little strange. Do we know what she was doing/why she was moving?
  • The sources do not seem to say. Reading between the lines it seems that the vessel required repair more frequently.
• "with much the copper" missing word
  • Added.
• "on 13 January" missing year
  • Added.
• "the vessel paid" sp
  • Corrected.
• I know nothing about the Chesapeake affair, but considering you describe Pylades as having a "critical role" in stopping "the altercation"(?) and as such preventing the UK from joining the ACW, I think more than two sentences could be devoted to expanding on this
  • The source does not go into a lot of detail but I have added some context that I hope helps the reader. The sentence is linked to the wikipedia article that does give more information on the affair (although it does not currently mention the corvette's role) so I hope that suffices.
• "Buckey Point" sp
  • Amended.

References

• BWAS 1793–1817 isn't a 2014 publication, nor does it include any mention of Pylades. Assume you mean Winfield, Rif (2014). British Warships in the Age of Sail 1817–1863: Design, Construction, Careers and Fates. Barnsley, South Yorkshire: Seaforth. ISBN 978-1-84832-169-4.
  • You are exactly right. Fixed.

@Simongraham: Hi, that's all I have for now. Will await your replies. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:48, 29 October 2023 (UTC)

• @Pickersgill-Cunliffe: Thank you for this thorough review. I have made the amends I can. simongraham (talk) 23:37, 29 October 2023 (UTC)

• @Simongraham: Happy with your changes. Passing this article as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 13:39, 1 November 2023 (UTC)

• @Pickersgill-Cunliffe: Thank you very much. I hope you found it as interesting as I did to discover the stories connected with this ship. Seeing your edits also prompted me that I need to update the table in the Contest. I plan to add this one to November's list when it becomes available. simongraham (talk) 00:28, 2 November 2023 (UTC)