Talk:HMS Martin (1910)/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 16:15, 8 April 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:15, 8 April 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

• No duplicated links
• No edit wars
• Image correctly licensed
• Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

• "Acorn class was"
  • Corrected.
• "the ship joined the Grand Fleet based at Devonport" this suggests that the Grand Fleet, rather than the destroyer, was based at Devonport, which I don't believe is true?
  • Good spot. I have added a conjunction to make it clear.
• "and potentially sank U-69" also, could this not equally be U-44?
  • U-44 was neither damaged nor sunk in the attack. I have added that to the body.

Design and description

• "Acorn class was"
  • Corrected.
• I think a word or two on the intended role of destroyers would be useful towards the start of this, otherwise the reader is launched in rather suddenly
  • I have added a bit of context. Please tell me if you feel there should be more.
• Link aft
  • Linked.

Construction and career

• "undertake escort duties" escorting what?
  • Clarified.
• Link Dover
  • Linked.
• "merchant shipping had ceased" perhaps clarify where shipping had ceased? This could be misinterpreted!
  • Clarified.
• "instead the ships continued to have to route via the western coast of Britain." in connection to the previous point, this doesn't currently make much sense
  • True.
• "sunk" > "sank"
  • Fixed.
• "The depth" no capital needed
  • I have amended the sentence so hopefully it is clearer.
• "are reported to have damaged the submarine." by who?
  • Added.
• Link Lough Swilly
  • Linked.
• Link port
  • Linked.
• "3 other destroyers" believe your rule is to spell out single digit numbers
  • Fixed.
• "it may also" capital I
  • Fixed.
• Was Drake torpedoed under Martin's escort or did Martin only turn up afterwards?
  • Clarified.
• "keel over" suggest capsize
  • Amended.
• "Arabis-class sloop Delphinium" suggest being consistent on whether you state the class of ships; you do for some e.g. here but not others e.g. Drake
  • Good spot. Added Drake.
• "Armistice,Martin" space
  • Added.
• "However, the Royal Navy returned" > "The Royal Navy afterwards returned"
  • Corrected.

References

• I'm not seeing where Monograph No. 30 says what is cited with ref. 16
  • Changed to better source.
• Spot checks otherwise look OK, but a brief check by you on the monographs would be worthwhile
  • Thank you. I have gone through them and added a sourced deployment in 1915.

@Simongraham: That's all I have for now. Will await your replies. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 18:39, 8 April 2023 (UTC)

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe: Thank you for your excellent review. I believe I have made all the changes. Please tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 06:40, 9 April 2023 (UTC)

@Simongraham: Have made one minor change but otherwise happy with the article. Passing as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 11:33, 9 April 2023 (UTC)