Talk:Grevillea juniperina/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 09:48, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

More than pleased to take up this review. Of course, you have improved the article awesomely, but I have a few suggestions:

• Robert Brown once linked in the lead need not be linked again afterwards. Same for inflorescence

hmm, not sure about this - tradition has been to link once in lead and once in body - the MOS on linking does not confirm this however. Have been doing it this way for (probably) 50 FAs so far Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• Perhaps Grevillea juniperina can be abbreviated as G. juniperina at some places.

abbreviated some that do not begin a sentence Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• In Description, ...though occasionally arise... --> ...though they occasionally arise...

done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• The spider-like flowers are red, pink, orange, yellow or greenish, and are mostly terminal—arising on the ends of stems—though occasionally arise from axillary buds. They are 2.5–3.5 cm (1–1 3⁄8 in) long. The spider-flower arrangement of the inflorescence has several individual flowers emerging from a central rounded flower head—reminiscent of the legs of a spider. Perhaps the latter sentence should precede the former one, the reader would primarily like to know why they are called d spider-like.

flipped Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• ...and releases 1–2 seeds when ripe... According to MOS,one to two seeds would read better.

done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• Conversion templates required towards the end of "Description".

added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• Who is Don MacGillivray? Provide a link or give their identity.

linked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:06, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• G. juniperina subsp. allojohnsonii According to what I have seen elsewhere, may be you could also write G. j. allojohnsonii? See for instances throughout the text. Not sure if it applies to plant species.
• A better way of presentation: G. juniperina subsp. fortis Makinson --> G. j. fortis Makinson ; G. juniperina subsp. sulphurea (A.Cunn.) Makinson (formerly var. trinervata) -->G. juniperina subsp. sulphurea (A.Cunn.) Makinson (formerly var. trinervata) Can you also add the years in which they were named?

I've put the small authorities in - am not so sure about putting the dates after commas in body of text. Have put a note explaing they were all ratified in 2000. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:03, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• Link alluvial, eucalypt, woodland, hybrid

done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• Intervals of 10 to 15 years between fires are thought to be... sounds a bit vague.

the vagueness reflects that we think this is the case but do not know conclusively that it's true Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• ...negatively impact on its growth... remove "on"

done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

• Could you explain more on the negative impact boxthorn has on the juniper?

inhibits its spread - added last word... Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

Cheers! Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 09:48, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

I feel all the issues have been resolved. This is quite ready for the GA status. Congrats! Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 16:18, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.