Talk:Great Bear (roller coaster)/GA1
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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 21:55, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.
If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)
I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.
Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)
Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.
Links edit
Prose edit
Lede edit
- maximum speed of 58 miles per hour (93 km/h) or 60 miles per hour (97 km/h), - how can it have two maximum speeds? Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:31, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- I have fixed this now - different sources give conflicting top speeds. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
- including steel roller coaster SooperDooperLooper and log flume Coal Cracker, as well as the Spring Creek - we name three items, but use "and" before the second one? Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:31, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- Fixed. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
- major elements represent the stars within the constellation - presumably this is an aesthetic thing? Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:31, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- I think the seven elements represent the fact that there are seven stars in Ursa Major, rather than representing the stars themselves. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
- There is one ref in the infobox, can we not cite this in the body instead? Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:31, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- I have moved it down now. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
General edit
- look for roller coaster records because it would not equate to better thrills - I think we need toexplain what we mean by records. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:38, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- I added a link to List of roller coaster rankings. Basically, from the 1980s to the 2000s, several amusement parks in the US were competing to build the fastest, tallest, or longest roller coasters, breaking either the world record or a regional record (e.g. tallest roller coaster in the state). Hersheypark did not want to build a record-breaking roller coaster because the park wouldn't derive any additional benefit from having, say, the tallest or fastest roller coaster. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
- the company met the park's preferences - I don't really know what this means. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:46, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- Basically, B&M's plan was most similar to what Hersheypark wanted, but since that phrase is redundant, I have removed it. Hersheypark presumably chose B&M because Hersheypark thought B&M had the best proposal. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
- "entitled" does not mean what you use it to mean. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:46, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- Fixed. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
- about 1.2 million riders per year. - presumably this is an average? Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:46, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- Yep. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
- The image in characteristics is a bit hard to tell which bit is the ride from the description Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:46, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- I have clarified the caption now. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
- The ride is supported by either 214[15] or 217 piers.[ - I'm a bit unsure how it can be both? Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:46, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- I've clarified that the sources disagree over how many piers the ride has. I'm not exactly sure why there's a discrepancy, but it could be the way that the piers are counted, especially if there are clusters of several piers. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
- In addition, pairs of red "photo eyes" are mounted above the track to detect obstructions. A beam of light shines between each pair of "photo eyes", and the ride automatically shuts down if the light beam is obstructed. - this doesn't exactly explain what a "photo eye" is. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:46, 30 October 2022 (UTC)
- I've clarified this now. Unfortunately, the source doesn't specify whether these are infrared, laser, or regular light sensors. Epicgenius (talk) 13:16, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
Review meta comments edit
- I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:55, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
- @Lee Vilenski: Thanks for the review. I have now addressed all of the issues you mentioned above. Epicgenius (talk) 13:17, 31 October 2022 (UTC)