Talk:Glad (duke)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 05:20, 23 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi! I will be reviewing this. Adding my comments shortly. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 05:20, 23 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• around 900, Add "AD"
  • Done. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• Citations generally do not occur in the lead. All facts of the lead are mentioned in the main text and the citations occur only there.
  • I would like to avoid any copyright issue: "fictitious person" is a verbatim citation from a publication. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• occupied his duchy What does this mean?
  • Text modified. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• and Vlachs, or Romanians I am a bit confused by the "and" and the "or"
  • Text modified. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• Romania is linked twice
  • Delinked. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• at the beginning of the 11th century "in the early 11th century"?
  • Text modified. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Background

• around 837 Add "AD"
  • Done. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• The Annals of St. Bertin writes that "states that" may be better
  • • • Text modified. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• Link "basin"
  • Linked (I hope). Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• Duplink: Byzantine Empire
  • Delinked. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Banat on the eve of the Hungarian Conquest

• Can spear points inhumation graves be linked or explained?
  • Wikilinks added. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• Duplinks: Mureș River, Carpathian Basin, Bulgars, Moravia, Carolingian Empire, Bulgaria, Florin Curta
  • Delinked. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• Written sources prove Is "prove" not a bit too strong? Perhaps "imply" or "show"? which also proves that he identified Glad's duchy with the territory that is now known as Banat in the next section is similar.
  • Texts modified. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• Is Franks linked anywhere? It should be linked
  • Wikilink added. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• Bavarian Geographer Did I miss the writer?
  • Yes, he is linked in the same section. :) Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• Sălăgean and Pop Have they been introduced by their full names?
  • Text modified. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

The conquest of Banat

• Glad and his large army waited them You mean "awaited" them?
  • Text modified (actually, I do not know what is the better version). Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Glad in modern historiography

• only mentioned in the Gesta Hungarorum "mentioned only in the..." looks better
  • Text modified. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• "Vlad Georgescu" is a duplink.
  • Delinked. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• anachronism may be linked.
  • Wikilink added. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
• Does the image have anything to do with this section? Would look better in "Banat on the eve of the Hungarian Conquest".
  • I think the image should remain here: it is an old map, representing late 19th-century scholarship. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for your review. I fixed the above problems (I hope). Borsoka (talk) 15:52, 23 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi Borsoka Please wait for a few minutes so that I can point out all the issues. I guess I won't be able to come for a day or two, so possibly we could complete this review today itself! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 16:00, 23 March 2016 (UTC)

@Borsoka: I think that should be all. I must praise your awesome narrative, it was a really interesting read! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 16:26, 23 March 2016 (UTC)

@Sainsf:, thank you for your thorough review and for your kind words. Please find my comments above. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

@Borsoka: Thanks friend. This article is one of the few excellent reads I have come across here. I am glad to promote this. Cheers! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 04:01, 24 March 2016 (UTC)