Talk:G. D. Sweet Famous Players/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Kavyansh.Singh in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 14:41, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
Nominator: SL93 (talk · contribs) at 15:45, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
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Prose edit
The G. D. Sweet Famous Players was a theatre company
→ "The G. D. Sweet Famous Players was an American theater company" (in American English, the spelling is 'theater')
- Do we know when the company was founded?
Sweet moved from
→ "He moved from"
Sweet was described as "a showman" and "a large, imposing man, given to cigars and pearl-gray hats worn jauntily"
— by whom? We'll need inline attribution as to who believes this.
- Various times in the prose, "Sweet" should be replace by 'he' or suitable pronoun.
Author Marjorie Holmes wrote, "'Hi, G. D.!',
— the comma here after 'wrote' isn't required. Better replace by a colon sign (:)
- Several places where comma is just used to introduce a quote should either be removed or replaced by a colon sign (:)
- Do we know the name of "Mrs. Sweet"?
words like "hell" or "damn" were never used
— Why are these particular words used? Were these words common in performances by other companies? Is so, it should be specified.
- I don't know why those words weren't used or if those words were common in performances by other companies. I added the fact so readers would have a better idea of how the performances were. I could remove it. SL93 (talk) 23:10, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
- Since this was used in the DYK as well, I'll suggest to keep it. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:05, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
- Abie's Irish Rose and Up in Mabel's Room is linked in the lead but not in the prose.
"one of the most comical offerings ever presented on the stage."
— we'll need a citation immediately after this quote.
Thats it
Images edit
- Are there no relevant images to add?
- There is an image of George Sweet and another one of his wife, but they are extremely hard to see. SL93 (talk) 23:15, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
- Fine. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:02, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
References edit
p. 65–66
— should be pp.p. 211–213
— same as above
- Thats it! Small, but nice article. Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:11, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
- Kavyansh.Singh I took care of what I could. SL93 (talk) 23:15, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
- I gave it another read and fixed a disambiguation link. Looking good now; Promoting! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:03, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
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