Talk:Ernest J. King/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Hawkeye7 (talk · contribs) 21:07, 27 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 01:47, 2 June 2024 (UTC)

Initial review

I plan to review this article. I have only glanced at the article so far and have no initial comments. Djmaschek (talk) 01:47, 2 June 2024 (UTC)

Review 1

I need to quit now. More will follow. Issues are listed below. Either fix or argue your case for not fixing. Djmaschek (talk) 02:40, 2 June 2024 (UTC)

• Well-written, verifiable, broad, neutral, stable, illustrated: These criteria appear to be met. However, details follow.  Done
• Introduction, paragraph 3, last sentence: "Kittery, Maine" should have a comma after Maine. Done
• Early life and education, paragraph 1, sentence 1: "Scottish Immigrant" - immigrant should not be capitalized. Done
• Surface ships, paragraph 7: "Veracruz. escorting a mule transport" - comma, not period. Done

  All done. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:16, 2 June 2024 (UTC)

Review 2

@Hawkeye7: Issues are listed below. Djmaschek (talk) 22:26, 3 June 2024 (UTC)

• While King's promotions and dates are listed at the bottom, some (lt. commander, commander, captain) are not mentioned in the text. Please add the promotions/dates to the text.

  Y Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

• Suddenly, under the Submarines section, he has a commodore pennant!

  It was a title of the senior captain, not a rank. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

• Aviation, paragraph 5, indented quote: "of a number factors" (of factors?)

  Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:24, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

• Aviation, paragraph 6: "wrote to the President [FDR]" ("the" not needed)

  Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

• War in the Atlantic (non-neutral): It's not clear to me, the reader, how this article is non-neutral. The article states that King was anti-British, but also that he was capable of getting along with certain Brits on a personal basis. How, exactly is that non-neutral? I only skimmed the long, tedious discussion on the talk page. Can you ask the challenger to remove this?

  We have agreed on some changes, which I will incorporate next week. I do not have access to my books at the moment. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

• War in the Atlantic, paragraph 1: "operation in the Mediterranean" (operations?)'

  Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

• War in the Atlantic, paragraph 5, "gross register tons" (there is a link to this term)

  Y Linked. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

• War in the Atlantic, paragraph 7: "proved futile". (needs a closed quote)

  Y Closed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

• War in the Atlantic, paragraph 9: "A wording was negotiated" (rewording?)

  Y Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

• War in Europe, paragraph 1: "The U.S. Army planners that the Western Allies did not have" (something wrong with sentence)

  Y Added missing word. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

GA class

@Hawkeye7: I am going to approve this for GA class despite the existing non-neutral (POV) challenge. In my opinion as a reviewer, the article meets the GA criteria. Another editor can always add a cited paragraph to this article, giving another author's alternate interpretation. Djmaschek (talk) 22:50, 6 June 2024 (UTC)