Talk:Edward I. Devitt/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:03, 3 March 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• " to Boston, Massachusetts at a" GEOCOMMA after Mass.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 23:48, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
• "in Frederick, Maryland and" ditto after Maryland.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 23:48, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
• After the first mention of his name in the lead, you use "he" eight times in a row, might be worth mixing it up with his surname a little bit for variety.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 23:49, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
• "He held the position for three years" both positions? You previously mention him taking on two roles.
  • The two were always held by the same person. They were essentially just different functions of the same office. Ergo Sum 23:50, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
• "November 26, 1840 in Saint John, New Brunswick in modern-day " comma after 1840 and Brunswick.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 23:50, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
• James Bayley or James Roosevelt Bayley? Be consistent.
  • Fixed. Ergo Sum 23:51, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
• "were surprised by his appointment" any insight as to why?
  • I'm not sure. I could speculate, but the source doesn't really give any indication. Ergo Sum 23:52, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
• "were considered lackluster" by whom?
  • Added some minor detail. The source speaks very generally, but it seems to indicate that it was his colleagues; the actual language it uses is "many of his friends and admirers". Ergo Sum 23:55, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
• "January 26, 1920 at" comma after 1920.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 23:56, 9 March 2020 (UTC)

That's it, nothing drastic here at all. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:18, 9 March 2020 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thank you for your review. Ergo Sum 23:56, 9 March 2020 (UTC)

De nada. It's all good for me, thank you for your good work as always and your prompt addressing of my concerns. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 23:57, 9 March 2020 (UTC)

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