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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 06:45, 19 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

WP:LEAD
  Done No longer confusing. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
My complaint was that you were omitting details leading to confusion, and your solution was to remove more detail, if I am understanding what you did.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:33, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
That refers to Ratings, I was talking about reviews, but now it's no longer confusing, as I edited the sentence.
More content omission?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:36, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
They are present in other GA Leads like the one for Grey's Anatomy (season 2). Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:17, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I am just saying that details about airings of clip shows is far less important than details about Emmys, Golden Globes and Nielsen ratings.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:39, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Oh, I see. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 07:48, 26 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Do you feel you can structure this lead like the 4-paragraph leads in the examples above?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:42, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I think you've misunderstood. Grey's Anatomy (season 2) and Fringe (season 2) had their leads restructured, in order to get the article nominated for FA. They only had two paragraphs (just like the one in this article, as I wrote it like the one for Grey's Anatomy (season 2) ), when they were promoted to GA (see Grey's Anatomy (season 1) and Grey's Anatomy (season 4)) Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 07:31, 26 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
There is no reason not to try to format the LEAD in the preferred manner. It is too bunched up in two paragraphs when you have similar content to that expressed in four paragraphs.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:00, 26 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Just dropping a note - Fringe (season 2) had four paragraphs when it achieved GA status. I have no expectations (at least now) for it to ever become a FA. I agree with Tony that this lead should be expanded. Currently your first paragraph is so big, it detracts from its readability. Ruby 2010/2013 21:45, 26 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Production
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 09:16, 20 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done Next is the second season premiere of the show. I added a wikilink to its article, so it so no loger confusing. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 09:16, 20 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
It is now WP:OVERLINKed (four times in the text and once in the table). Reduce to at most twice in the text and once in the table.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:22, 20 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Cast
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 09:16, 20 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Not done I wrote the section this way, in order to present the gardener in the second subsection. In the first subsection, it is only a mention of him, due to my wanting only to present the character of Gabrielle Solis. I suggest it is better we leave it as it is. What do you think? Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 09:16, 20 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
That is fine, but in the second section you must make sure it is clear who the gardener is.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:25, 20 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Critical response
Almost every review for the season was critical of the development. However, there were many awards, but that doesn't change the negative feedback in the "Critical response" subsection, which refers only to the reviews. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:17, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
No, it was not. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 09:26, 20 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done As the series was not in any top 10 lists. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I find it hard to believe it was GG- and SAG-nominated as one of the best 5 comedies and not on any top 10 lists.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:09, 26 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
[1] Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 12:37, 27 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
You need to explain this point with this link in the text.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:22, 27 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Wait a second. You use the GG and SAG for the 2005 calendar year and you now point to the top ten lists for 2006. Isn't this the set of top ten lists that goes along with the GG and SAG ceremonies that you have already included in the article. It has at least 3 top 10 lists.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:13, 27 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Comment: "Best of 2006" is what should be used, because "Best of 2005" is for season one. Top ten lists go by the second part of the TV-season. ie. Grey's Anatomy#Critics' top ten lists's third season (2006-07) would refer to top ten lists for "Best of 2007". Hope this helps, TRLIJC19 (talk) 22:17, 27 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
It does not make sense to only present GG and SAG for the 2005 calendar year and the top ten for 2006. I argue that both years should be mentioned for GG, SAG and top 10 lists. WP:OTHERSTUFFEXISTS is not an argument against this common sense.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:21, 27 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
It's not necessarily an argument. House, M.D., a FA, only uses the second half of the year. As does Grey's Anatomy, a GA. It seems to be a standardized use. TRLIJC19 (talk) 22:24, 27 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Feel free to comment at Wikipedia_talk:WikiProject_Television#Calandar_year_awards_in_season_articles.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:38, 27 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Awards and nominations
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Not sure I don't know what you mean. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:03, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
E.g., GG and SAG awards are not an a TV season schedule. The GG and SAG are almost on a calendar year cycle (probably a November to November) cycle. Since most shows are on hiatus in December it is loosely regarded as a calendar year cycle. Thus, the Jan-May episodes were part of the awards recognizing the 2006 calendar year that you are omitting.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:51, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Now I understand. Thank you, Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 07:34, 26 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 07:47, 26 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Actually, the awards are strictly calendar-based for eligibility. Just called both.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:02, 26 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
You must explain to the reader that which year each calendar year based award covers.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:38, 11 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
Ratings
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:35, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I don't see any commentary on this issue.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:53, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
What do you mean? Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 07:47, 26 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • "Although the episode attracted less viewers than CSI, it outperformed both Lost and Grey's Anatomy, one of the most successful series of the season." seems ungrammatical because you have a both this and that, followed by one of. I am not sure how important this sentence is. It needs to be restructured if it is to be kept.
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
It seems unchanged in this regard and remains ungrammatical sounding to me.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:39, 12 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 19:19, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Home vieo release
I will start addressing the issues right away. Thank you so much for reviewing! Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 09:26, 20 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I didn't finish checking everything, but you seem to be a hostile editor doing almost the opposite of every instruction.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:57, 25 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I most certainly am not a hostile editor. I apologize if I made it seem that way. I'll start addressing the other issues. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 07:36, 26 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

I have notified the main discussant that he should attempt to resume making progress on this article.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:22, 3 July 2012 (UTC)Reply