Talk:Danny Higginbotham/GA1
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GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:32, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
Hi! I will take up this review. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 04:32, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
Lead
editLoan spell may be linked to Loan (sports)- Can we have money conversion templates wherever possible in the article?
- What are they?.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
both the semi-final and the final. Why is only "final" linked?but injury meant he missed out on both the semi-final and the final. Could be reworded as but missed out on both the semi-final and the final due to injury.What injury was it?Born in England Why is his birthplace repeated? That too here?after a long career You can add how many years long the career wasWe do not generally keep citations in the lead, I would like them just in the main text. And please ensure that all facts of the lead are also mentioned in the main text.
Playing career
editbut despite passing his eleven plus exam he was denied entry into Altrincham Grammar School for Boys Could be separated into a new line.His elder brother His name?
Manchester United
edit- and asked to return to Old Trafford I think "was" asked would be clearer
- No, he himself asked to return to the club.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
However he recovered However, heHowever following defeat However, followingHowever following defeat in a play-off game Higginbotham was banned from football for a year for his involvement in an attack on referee Amand Ancion by teammate Ronnie Wallwork Can this be split? It would be easier to read
Derby County
editDuplinks: Denis Irwin, Premier League, Old Trafford, Southampton
Southampton
editDuplinks: Premier League, Southamptonon loan until "loan" can be linked as I suggested in the lead- fee of £1.5 million. Money conversion?
but was an unused substitute for the final against Arsenal. Source?
Stoke City
edit- an initial fee of £225,000 Money conversion?
- The Potters went seven games Have "Potters" been linked earlier
- How do you mean?--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
Sunderland
edit- fee of £2.5 million, possibly rising to £3 million Money conversion?
Duplink: Premier League
Return to Stoke City
editDuplinks: Premier League, Tony Pulis, Wolverhampton Wanderers, Bolton Wanderer, FA Cup, Newcastle United
Later career
editDuplink: Sheffield UnitedAfter making seventeen appearances Numbers equal to or above 10 are typically kept in digits.
International career
editmanager, Allen Bula is --> manager, Allen Bula, isCan friendly be linked?
Personal life
editentitled: 'Rise of the Underdog'. --> entitled Rise of the Underdog.His first born child, Jak, was born in 2001 --> His first child, Jak, was born in 2001I think the first marriage and his first wife should be mentioned before the children.
That should be all. Good luck! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 15:22, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
- OK thanks! What are these money conversion templates?--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- EchetusXe Thanks for the response! I have seen money conversion templates being used in some similar articles, but I am clueless about their documentation as well. It is not a GA requirement anyway, so we need not mess with that. And I was asking if you have wikilinked "Potters" anywhere. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 18:00, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- OK cool, would you like me to link "Potters" to Stoke City F.C.?--EchetusXe 18:03, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- Sure, that should be proper. That done, I would be glad to promote this article. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 18:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- OK, have done that. Many thanks!--EchetusXe 22:40, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
- No more issues, I am happy to promote this. Great job! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 05:50, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- OK, have done that. Many thanks!--EchetusXe 22:40, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
- Sure, that should be proper. That done, I would be glad to promote this article. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 18:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- OK cool, would you like me to link "Potters" to Stoke City F.C.?--EchetusXe 18:03, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
- EchetusXe Thanks for the response! I have seen money conversion templates being used in some similar articles, but I am clueless about their documentation as well. It is not a GA requirement anyway, so we need not mess with that. And I was asking if you have wikilinked "Potters" anywhere. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 18:00, 26 March 2016 (UTC)