Talk:Colin Hall Simpson/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Anotherclown in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 22:21, 16 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

Progression edit

  • Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
  • Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review edit

Criteria edit

  • It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
    • I think the birth date here might be in error: "Major General Colin Hall Simpson, CBE, MC, VD (13 April 1896 – 23 August 1964)...", in the infobox and the body of the article you have him born in 1894.
    • "He served with the 49th (Prahran) Battalion...", can 49th Bn be wikilinked?
      • Done. The modern 49th is in Queensland. In the shakeup it was replaced with the battalion I wikilinked, which inherited its lineage. Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
    • Typo here I think: "The news that Yugoslavia had offered to surrender reach Blamey...", perhaps "The news that Yugoslavia had offered to surrender reached Blamey..."
    • This reads a little awkwardly for me: "He organised the The Association, a right wing paramilitary organisation headed by Blamey which was established to counter a possible communist coup." Specifically "the The Association". Could this possibly be reworded? Also I wonder if it would be benificial to add that it was a clandistine organisation (minor point)?
  • It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    • All major points cited using WP:RS.
    • Consistent citation style used throughout.
    • No issues with OR.
    • Mallett, Ross A. (2007). Australian Army Logistics 1943–1945. University of New South Wales. Retrieved 31 October 2011 lacks a place of publishing. Is this available?
  • It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    • All major points are covered without going into undue detail.
    • "Simpson participated in the Battle of Passchendale where he was gassed and wounded for the second time...", are there any details available for the first time he was wounded?
      • Well spotted. It will be in his file. Unfortunately, I cannot get down there until next year. Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:40, 21 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
        • Too easy, if its not available in the sources theres no dramas. Anotherclown (talk) 02:56, 21 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    a (fair representation):   b (all significant views):  
    • No issues here.
  • It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:  
    • All recent edits look constructive.
  • It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned):   b (Is illustrated with appropriate images):   c (non-free images have fair use rationales):   d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:  
    • Images used are all in the public domain and seem appropriate for the article.
  • Overall:
    a Pass/Fail: