Talk:Clal Center/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Yoninah in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:26, 25 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Hi! I will review this. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 04:26, 25 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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Location

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Alliance Vocational School campus

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Design

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Criticism

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  • Who is Kroyanker? You should introduce these people by their full names.
Sorry, I did not notice it earlier. We need not introduce him again, so I removed the second mention. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 07:26, 27 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • Can foot traffic be linked or explained?
    •  Y I rephrased it as "commercial activity". To my understanding, "commercial activity" refers to sales and stores, while "business activity" refers to office space. Yoninah (talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Incident

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Yes, better.

Images: The images appear to have been squashed by the infobox. You can change their aligns so that the text corresponds to the image at least near to it, if not beside it.

  • I'm not expert on the technical side of things. I put the memorial images one after another under Alliance Vocational School campus and the following images one after another under Design. I don't understand what you want me to do. Yoninah (talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
I think I have solved this problem now. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 07:32, 27 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • Note: I would like to note that the Jerusalem Municipality has suddenly taken down its Clal Center page (in Hebrew), which I used for a lot of the information. Will that be a problem? Yoninah (talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
I think not. As per Wikipedia:Link rot#Keeping dead links, we can keep such necessary sources. Nevertheless, you can try to relocate the source at web archives. I had a similar discussion at Talk:Pink slime/GA3. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 07:32, 27 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

That should be all. Good luck! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 04:43, 25 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Hi @Sainsf: thanks for starting the review. I've been offline for a few days due to Purim and Shabbat, and will get back to you shortly. Yoninah (talk) 17:53, 26 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
@Yoninah: Thanks for your response. I believe the article meets all the GA criteria now. No copyvio detected, sources look good, images are better now and the prose great. I am happy to promote this. Cheers! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 07:35, 27 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
Thanks! Yoninah (talk) 08:35, 27 March 2016 (UTC)Reply