Talk:Chris Hussey/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Nehme1499 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Nehme1499 (talk · contribs) 18:57, 29 January 2022 (UTC)
Hi, I'll take care of this nomination. This is my first review, hopefully it goes well for both of us :) Nehme1499 18:57, 29 January 2022 (UTC)
- Okay thank you, it's very thorough. I have addressed those points now.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
- Perfect, I've also cleaned up a couple of details. With the changes made, I'm happy to promote the article :) Nehme1499 13:48, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
Comments
editInfobox
edit- It's standard not to put questions marks (?) when information is unknown. For example, "200?–200?" should be removed; there is no problem in not having a year range.
- Left-back can be linked to Full-back (association football)
Lead
edit- I would add "professional" between
English footballer
, as it's standard to do so for professional footballers. - Change
as a defender
toas a left-back
, in line with the infobox. before earning a contract with AFC Wimbledon
. Add "senior" or "professional" before contract, to emphasise that he didn't move to another youth team.He was signed by Championship club Coventry City for an undisclosed fee
: no need for "for an undisclosed fee", can be just kept in the main body of the article.- I would link the seasons (for e.g.
2010–11 season
), to their respective club seasons (2010–11 Coventry City F.C. season). Same goes for the league seasons. - The lead is generally good, though I think it's slightly overly-detailed. Try to cut down a bit. For example,
He helped Cheltenham to reach the play-offs at the end of the 2019–20 season, though they were eliminated at the semi-final stage. The club went on to win promotion as League Two champions in 2020–21, with Hussey featuring 48 times
can by changed to something likeHe helped Cheltenham to reach the play-offs at the end of the 2019–20 season; they won promotion the following season as League Two champions
. I think the two paragraphs should be halved.- Have trimmed it to roughly half.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
- Also, I don't think specific apps are necessary in the lead, except in the first instance (
Despite ongoing injury issues he managed to make 31 appearances
). You could generally replace those with "as a starter".
Career
edit- Add a section for the first sentence called "Early career" or "Youth career".
AFC Wimbledon
edit- I would prefer to add "season" to 2006–07, so that it pipes as such: 2006–07 season. It's just my personal preference, though. The same applies throughout the article.
- I prefer not to link season.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
pre–season
: use a regular dash (pre-season).as the club's first choice left-back
: "first-choice" acts as an adjective to "left-back", and should be hyphenated.- Ah good, the last GA review said the opposite.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
Wimbledon were promoted into the Conference South with victory over Staines Town in the play-off final
: with "a" victory?- I always said "with victory" but I think it's better the the scoreline anyway.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
second successive promotion / AFC Wimbledon Young Player of the Year Award
: should be hyphenated in both instances.He started every match of the 2009–10 season until his departure in October. He made a total of 79 league and cup appearances for Wimbledon
: can be joined into a single sentence....until his departure in October, making a total...
- Okay good.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
- I would divide the first paragraph into two, between
he made 11 appearances in the Southern League Division One South & West
andAfter returning from his loan spell
Coventry City
editHe spent the most of the 2009–10 season on the substitute bench
, as opposed to another bench? I would remove "substitute".he returned to training in late–October
: use a regular hyphen.- Link metatarsal
He then was given a handful
: swap "then" with "was".bringing his final appearance tally for the season to 12
. Change to "final seasonal appearance tally", to avoid repetition with "season" in the next sentence.he managed to regain his first team place
: hyphen between "first" and "team" (in all instances).After returning to the first team, he set up one of the goals in a 2–0 win
: use "assisted" to avoid repetition.He struggled for form however and was defended by manager
. Add commas before and after "however" (...form, however, and...)- It would be a good idea to divide the Wimbledon and Coventry sections in further subsections (either by season, or year span). Two or three subsections each should be enough.
AFC Wimbledon (2)
edit- Rename the section into "Return to AFC Wimbledon".
second–half substitute
: use a regular hyphen.However he was released in May 2013
: comma after "however".
Burton Albion
editHe scored his first goals for Burton when he scored twice
: using "scored" twice in the same sentence is too repetitive.- Divide the paragraph into two, starting from
He left the club on loan
. He featured in the play–offs
: regular hyphen.He featured in the play–offs, playing three times in the club's unsuccessful attempt to reach League One, losing 1–0 to Fleetwood Town in the final at Wembley Stadium
: the sentence structure is a bit clunky, with two -ing verbs in a row.- I notice that "he" is being used far more than "Hussey". Try to balance the two out.
Bury
edithe was recalled by Burton Albion the end of April
: "in late-April".- Link free transfer, also in the first instance in the lead.
two–year contract
: use a regular hyphen.left–back position
: use regular hyphens in all instances. Also, try to not repeat "left-back position" all three times; use other wording.Having provided ten assists in 42 appearances
: replace ten with 10.- In general, as I pointed out above, try also using "assist" instead of "set up" sometimes.
- The Hussey/he problem I pointed out in the section above applies to the whole article. (Same with Hussey's/his)
saying it had improved by 60% since his arrival at the club
: use quotes, as "60%" is just a random number the manager used figuratively.- Also divide this section into subsections.
- Are you sure there aren't an excessive amount of sections now?--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
Sheffield United
editHussey went on to lose his place at left–back in favour of Daniel Lafferty and would feature just seven times in the league
: add a comma between "Lafferty" and "and".- Change "would feature" into "featured".
- Add a subsection titled "Loan to Swindon Town" for the second paragraph; also, divide the second paragraph into two (starting from "He was an ever-present in the side until he suffered a groin injury).
Cheltenham Town
edit- Divide into subsections.
and "he's a good defender"
: change toand is "a good defender"
.to record six wins in seven games and scoring a free-kick
: add a comma between "games" and "and".only to lose 3-2 on aggregate
: use an en dash (–).He signed a new two-year contract extension in January 2021 to extend his contract until the summer of 2023
. I would rephrase into:In January 2021, Hussey signed a two-and-a-half-year contract extension
.- Change "free-kick" into "free kick", and link to Free kick (association football).
He played 155 games in and three-and-a-half seasons at Cheltenham
: remove "and", and remove the hyphens from "three-and-a-half" as it doesn't act as an adjective.Upon leaving the club, said that
: "Hussey said that".
Port Vale
editManager Darrell Clarke said that "I've always...
: since it's a direct quote, remove "that" and add a colon (... said: "I've always...).
International career
edit- Rephrase to:
In February 2009, Hussey was called up by the England national C team as a standby.
Style of play
edit- Link to Defender (association football), Full-back (association football), Wing-back (association football), Wide midfielder, Cross (association football), Set piece (football).
- Add a comma after "attacking abilities".
Personal life
edit- Divide into paragraphs, as his OCD, daughters, app, and character aren't linked together.
Career statistics
edit- General consensus is to pipe EFL Cup into League Cup.
2 appearances in EFL Trophy, 2 appearances in League Two play-offs
: change the "2"s into "Two".
References
edit- I've taken a look at a handful of references, and a few are missing authors. Make sure all references have them (if they are indicated).
- Done, that took a while.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
- Remove "www." from the website names. For example, "www.ctfc.com" should be "ctfc.com", if not the name of the website itself (Cheltenham Town FC)
- Fix the results in the citations to the standard form. For example, "0-3" and "4 – 0" should be "0–3" and "4–0" respectively.
Images
edit- I know that finding images for footballers can be very difficult, so the lack of them won't impact the review. Still, did you try searching in free-to-use websites, such as flickr?
- Could not find any.--EchetusXe 02:01, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
Assessment
edit- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
