Talk:Chamber pop/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 22:55, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• (or ork-pop) → (also referred to as ork-pop)
• but without irony or kitsch → without containing irony or kitsch

Definition and roots

• 1966 album → 1966 studio album
• summarizes: "think → summarizes; "think
• (no relation) → this is overfluous and can be thus be removed

• He may be confused with Carl Wilson, who is Brian's brother and Beach Boy bandmate.--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:37, 2 November 2016 (UTC)

• that was labelled chamber pop → that approached chamber pop

• I think this would be distorting the source, which is talking about the term "chamber pop", not the style.--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:37, 2 November 2016 (UTC)

• explained: "When → explained; "When
• mystery ... → mystery [...]
• "ork-pop" (says Chris Holmes of the band Yum-Yum) → "ork-pop", according to Chris Holmes of band Yum-Yum (unlink redlink)

• I believe an article could be made about the group (WP:REDYES).--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:37, 2 November 2016 (UTC)

• music file > lead vocal → lead vocals

Emergence and popularity

• O'Hagan commented: → O'Hagan commented;
• there. ... → there. [...]
• in their arrangements → who is 'they'?
• wrote: "Bored → wrote; "Bored
• popsmiths ... [are on] → popsmiths [...] [are on]
• pop masterpiece. ... → pop masterpiece. [...]
• these acts ... → these acts [...]
• Most ork-pop musicians → The majority of the ork-pop musicians
• of the music retailer → "the" is overfluous
• Witch Hazel → redlink; fix

• As above.--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:37, 2 November 2016 (UTC)

• as the duo → for duo
• debut album: "in → debut album; "in
• answered: "I → answered; "I
• change. ... I → change. [...] I

References

• No dead links. Good job!

Outcome

• I've put this  On hold for 7 days in order to allow edits on this article. Good job! Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 23:24, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
  • Done!--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:37, 2 November 2016 (UTC)
    • @Ilovetopaint: Gladly passing! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:07, 2 November 2016 (UTC)

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