Talk:Caesars Palace/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:56, 11 December 2015 (UTC)Reply


I'll start reading through this now. JAGUAR  20:56, 11 December 2015 (UTC)Reply

Initial comments

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  • "Opened in 1966 after four years of planning and construction" - best to start this sentence with something like It was opened in 1966... or First opened
  • "which was originally built at a cost of $95-million for Celine Dion's show A New Day... in 2003" - comma needed in between "show" and "A"
  • "stunt performer Evel Knievel arrived at the hotel to watch a boxing match and was convinced Sarno that he could jump" - delete "was"
  • " In September 2015, Caesars Palace agreed to pay the Financial Crimes Enforcement Network (FinCEN) an $8 million civil money penalty for violating the Bank Secrecy Act (BSA)" - FinCEN and BSA aren't mentioned in the article again, so I'm not sure why these abbreviations are here
  • "A 20 feet (6.1 m) high statue of Julius Caesar hailing a cab" - 'taxi' might sound more informal, although I'm not sure if "cab" is preferred in the US
  • "It was made in Bangkok, Thailand, with a casting ceremony on November 25, 1983, according to the inscription on it" - this sentence doesn't have a citation
  • "WIFI access and shoeshine services are available for an additional charge" - WiFi
  • "Celebrities like Paris Hilton and Christine Aguilera" - Christina
  • "The featured desert is spotted dog" - it's spotted dick?
Spotted dog -it's a gimmick I think, it means spotted dick.
  • "the restaurant must be limited to service five days a week, to which Caesars agreed" - how about to which the management agreed?

References

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  • Ref 143 redirects to its main site
  • Other than that, no dead links and the refs are all formatted correctly

Many thanks for taking this on, given the limited time left before his anniversary!♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:16, 11 December 2015 (UTC)Reply

On hold

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Those were all! of the prose issues I could find during my review of the article. Nice work on this! It's well written and comprehensive. I love Caesars Palace now! JAGUAR  21:28, 11 December 2015 (UTC)Reply

All answered for Jaguar, some good points, cheers. Considering the status of this place it really lacks scholarly/decent material aside from the typical Vegas touristy type stuff and news stories/snippets in books. There should be a detailed book on its history and architecture but there isn't. I guess because the main point is the gambling! We've done pretty well considering though I think, though I'm sure somewhere there's a lot more material which could be added.♦ Dr. Blofeld 21:32, 11 December 2015 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for addressing them! I'm surprised to hear the lack of intellectual coverage on this, seeing as it's probably the biggest one in Las Vegas! Without further ado I'll promote this, just in time for Sinatra's 100th anniversary.   JAGUAR  21:41, 11 December 2015 (UTC)Reply