Talk:Billy Elliot/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:48, 1 April 2020 (UTC)Reply


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  • " British dance drama film" this is a WP:SEAOFBLUE. Doubtful of the utility of linking British or dance for our readers.
  • "earning £73 million (US$109.3 million) on a £3 million budget (US$5 million) worldwide." better as "earning £73 million (US$109.3 million) worldwide on a £3 million budget (US$5 million)."
  • Why are budgets in the infobox initially in $ whereas the lead has it initially in £ and it's a British movie?
    • Figures are now given only in USD, as per their sources. I think we should just stick to USD, as providing the £ conversion now would just be an estimate. (I did take a look at 2015 British films and only USD is given.)
  • soup kitchen could be linked.
  • Don't link major geographical entities like London.
  • "Terraced homes used.." fragment, no full stop. If you added "were" between homes and used, keep the full stop.
  • Ellipsis needs non-breaking spaces either side.
  • "The BBC also financed" why "also"? And consider linking BBC.
  • " in total[5] before" nasty placement, move to after punctuation.
  • "On 3 June 1999..." whole para is unref.
    • I was unable to find a source to cite any of that, so I've added a new paragraph of details.
  • Newcastle-upon-Tyne and Lynemouth are overlinked.
  • "Billy Elliot advert" italics for title of movie.
  • Also would make that "advertisement" for encyclopedic tone.
  • Dancer in the Dark has a small "i" for In.
  • "on Blu-ray Disc on" remove "Disc".
  • "...on 10 January 2012." unref.
  • "Roger Ebert gave the..." who is he?
  • "the BBC gave" you linked BBC this time, but in italics now?
  • Recipients in the table, would expect them to sort by surname.
  • "reviews[53] and ran " move that ref to end.
  • Ref titles shouldn't be using spaced hyphens, they should use spaced en-dashes.
  • No SHOUTING in ref titles.
  • Consistent formatting of things like Rotten Tomatoes (italics or no?)
  • BAFTA awards refs need better titles.

That's enough for a first pass, so I'll put it on hold while we deal with these. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:53, 1 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review! I've addressed all the above comments, and replied to some of them. I've also done a cleanup of the prose, thanks Just Lizzy(talk) 16:13, 3 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Lizzy150 responded to a couple of those. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:23, 3 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Okeydokes, happy with this now meeting GA criteria. Well done, promoting. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply