Talk:Believe It or Not, Joe's Walking on Air/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 05:17, 8 October 2012 (UTC)

• Infobox: Production code cite?
• Lede: Change 'season 5' to 'season five' or 'the fifth season'
• Plot: "When Peter, Cleveland, Joe and Quagmire are at the Drunken Clam, when Lois, Bernice (Cleveland's first girlfriend since his divorce with Loretta) and Bonnie show up at the bar…" This sentence makes no sense grammatically. It starts with an independent clause with 'when', then segues into another 'when' clause. Please fix this.
• Plot: "…rid of the shed." Is the shed the bar? Explain this better, please.
• Plot: "Many people start to show up at the Quahog's Men's Club and Lois and her friends start to get annoyed by Peter and his friends being loud in the shed, so they upset them by going in there." -> "Many people start to show up at the Quahog's Men's Club and Lois and her friends start to get annoyed. In order to get back at them, they enter the club."
• Plot: "he'll" -> "he will" Watch contractions
• Production: Put quotation marks around 'The Juice is Loose'
• Production: The last sentence of the last paragraph needs a citation
• Cultural Refs: Put quotation marks around 'Good Morning'
• Reception: Explain what a Nielsen rating is (like you did on the others). This section needs to be cleaned up quite a bit. For he casual reader, what does (4.9/7) mean? Also, don't use the '#' sign, say 'number'
• Reception: Italicize AV Club
• Ref 6 should use en-dashes (–) instead of dashes (-)
• There is a double parenthesis in Ref 4
• References: Ref 1 and 3's publishers should be Yahoo! TV
• References: Cut the 'Yahoo! TV' part of the title out of Refs 1 and 3
• References: Italicize The AV Club
• Categories: Alphabetize these

That's all. Sorry about the half-month delay. Real-life got in the way. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:11, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

I believe I've fixed all your concerns. Although the "Cut the 'Yahoo! TV' part of the title out of Refs 1 and 3" confused me. Pedro J. ^{the rookie} 20:50, 21 October 2012 (UTC)