Talk:Batuka (song)/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 11:43, 5 July 2020 (UTC)Reply


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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Should do this article today or tomorrow --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:43, 5 July 2020 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • Target Batuque to Batuque (music and dance)
  • Remove the formats
  • Remove target on Madonna Ciccone per WP:OVERLINK
  • Link to the music video in the infobox
  • "It was written by Madonna" → "The song was written by Madonna
  • "and produced by Madonna and Mirwais" → "while produced by Madonna and the latter of the three"
  • ""Batuka" features the" → "It features the"
  • "group who play drums" → "group that play drums" with the appropriate wikilink removal since it is obvious
  • "and lyrically it deals about" → "and the lyrics of the song are about"
  • "received positive reviews" → "received generally positive reviews"
  • Only one reviewer called it "hypnotic"; try and replace this with something else, though I may have further comment(s) about that once you have
  • "An accompanying music video for the song was" → "An accompanying music video was"
  • "and tried to recreate the" → "which was an attempt to recreate the"
  • "met the group and" → "met the Batukadeiras Orchestra, as well as"
  • ""Batuka" was included on" → "The song was included on"
  • "with the Batukadeiras Orchestra in a semi-circle playing drums" → "with the group performing in a semi-circle, playing drums,"

Background and recording

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  • On the text box, add a dash before Madonna's name to present the quote better
  • "In these sessions, they" → "In the sessions, they"
  • "its members ranked from teenage girls" → "the members ranged from teenage girls"
  • "Madonna described their first encounter as an" → "Madonna described her first encounter with them as an"
  • "experience. The music was" → "experience". She continued, stating that the "music was"
  • Remove target on Madame X
  • "which she encouraged them to just repeat" → "that she encouraged the Batukadeiras Orchestra to "just repeat""
  • Remove wikilink on translator
  • "according to the singer, they" → "according to Madonna, the group"
  • "that they all pray together" → "on everyone in the studio all praying together"
  • "they blessed Madonna" → "the Batukadeiras Orchestra blessed Madonna"
  • "commented about the moment," → "commented on the moment,"
  • "encounter it was"." → "encounter it was."" since that is a full sentence quotation
  • Target feminist to Feminism
  • "because she felt it sounded" → "due to her feeling it sounded"
  • "called it "Batuka" because" → "retitled the song to "Batuka" because,"
  • "played by women"." → "played by women.""

Composition

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  • Retitle to Composition and lyrics
  • "Madonna, Mirwais Ahmadzaï and David Banda" → "Madonna, Mirwais and Banda" with the appropriate target
  • "production was in charge of the singer and Ahmadzaï" → "production was handled by the singer and Mirwais"
  • "David was the only one" → "Banda was the only one"
  • Target batuque to Batuque (music and dance)
  • [6][7] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
  • "It features drums played" → "The song features drums played" with the removed wikilink
  • [8][9] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [1]
  • "with the orchestra singing their own solos in Cape Verdean Creole language" → "with the group singing their own solos in the Cape Verdean Creole language"
  • "Its lyrics deal about" → "The lyrics deal with"
  • [8] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [10][11]
  • "The line "Get that old man/put him in a jail/where he can’t stop us" was" → "The lyrics "Get that old man/put him in a jail/where he can't stop us" were"
  • "reference to the current" → "reference to current"
  • [12][15] should both be solely at the end of the sentence

Critical reception

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  • "According to Nicholas Hautman of Us Weekly, the song" → "Nicholas Hautman of Us Weekly stated the song"
  • [17] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [18]
  • "Opinion that was shared" → "C.M.'s opinion was shared"
  • "Nick Smith, it" → "Nick Smith, the song"
  • [20] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [21]
  • "According to Xavi Sancho from El País, the Batukadeiras Orchestra" → "Xavi Sancho from El País wrote that the Batukadeiras Orchestra"
  • "that "Batuka" successfully" → "that the song successfully"
  • "as well as calling it" → "while calling it"
  • "opined it" → "opined that the song"
  • "that accompanied by the" → "that her accompanied by the"
  • "Kristi Kates from Northern Express newspaper" → "Kristi Kates of the Northern Express newspaper"
  • "was also positive," → "was similarly positive,"
  • "noted that "Batuka" was one" → "noted that the song was one"
  • "Wren Graves of" → "In a mixed review, Wren Graves of"
  • "to the song, but called it" → "to "Batuka", though called the song"
  • "came from Daniel Megarry from" → "was provided by Daniel Megarry from"
  • "who classified it" → "who ranked it"
  • "Zilch"." → "Zilch.""

Music video

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  • "Filming for the music video for "Batuka"" → "Filming of the music video for "Batuka"" with the wikilink
  • "in April 2019, in" → "during April 2019 in"
  • "Julião, in" → "Julião of"
  • "who also directed the music video" → "who was also director of the video"
  • Add year in brackets for "Dark Ballet"
  • [32] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [16]
  • Remove wikilink on Refinery29
  • "how she met the group" → "how she met the Batukadeiras Orchestra"
  • "looked like a typical house" → "looked like a typical one"
  • "as their first meeting place," → "for their first meeting place,"
  • "She elaborated that she hoped it" → "Madonna elaborated, stating that she hoped it"
  • "and how "expressive" she" → "as well as how "expressive" she"
  • "and how she wanted to capture it in their" → "and having wanted to capture it in the"
  • Img needs alt text
  • "The video begins with the following message:" → "The music video begins with a message that reads,"
  • "upon the women of the orchestre," → "on the women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra,"
  • "as they sing, beat out" → "while they sing, beat out"
  • "looking out to the" → "from which the group look out to the"
  • "Madonna dances freestyle," → "Madonna performs a freestyle dance,"
  • "and joined them"." → "and joined them.""
  • "Upon its release, it received" → "The music video was met with"
  • "Little Black Book website called the video" → "Little Black Book website staff called it"
  • "and deemed it as a" → "while they deemed it as a"
  • "Justin Ravitz from Refinery29 called the video" → "Ravitz branded the visual"
  • [16] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [35][36]
  • "labeled it as" → "staff both labeled it as"
  • "noted how it references" → "noted how the video references"
  • "Portuguese newspaper Público opined that" → "The staff of Público opined that"
  • "According to Mike Nied from Idolator, "I'd say that she has" → "Mike Nied from Idolator said that "she has"
  • "felt from the group" → "felt from the Batukadeiras Orchestra"

Live performance

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  • "fourteen of the twenty two women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra" → "14 of the 22 women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra while performing"
  • "It began with the Orchestra gathering around" → "The performance began with the group gathering around"
  • "was sitting to the side" → "sat to the side"
  • "and doing some" → "and they did some"
I rewrote it as "and she did some" because Madonna was the one dancing, as ref 38 says Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Think you could add the date of the performance somewhere?
The performance was part of a tour which happened between 2019 and 2020, as stated in the article Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • [41] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [42]
  • "while according to Spencer Kornhaber from The Atlantic it was" → "while Spencer Kornhaber from The Atlantic said it was"

Credits and personnel

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  • Wikilink Madonna to herself
  • Target vocals to Singing
  • Credits and personnel adapted from the Madame X album liner notes.[4] → Credits and personnel adapted from the liner notes of Madame X.[4]

References

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  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  • Copyvio score is too high at 54.8%; fix quoting from ref 1 to decrease this
  • Remove or replace ref 5 per WP:RSP
  • Remove wikilink on Us Weekly for ref 17
  • MusicOMHmusicOMH on ref 20
  • Cite Ericeira Mag in the website/work layout instead for ref 30
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  • Remove video from here
Are you ok with the audio link? Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
Yeah, that's fine --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:51, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply

Final comments and verdict

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Kyle Peake   Done; take a look above Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
 Pass after the successful fixes! --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:51, 9 July 2020 (UTC)Reply