Talk:Banksia aculeata/GA1
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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 23:57, 29 February 2016 (UTC)
- Hi, I'll review this article. FunkMonk (talk) 23:57, 29 February 2016 (UTC)
- Seems a bit scant on images, perhaps this one[1] could be added somewhere?
- The main issue I find with the article is that there are many uncommon terms that are not explained. The links of course help, but as with other technical articles, I think explaining in parenthesis would be helpful for the layreader...
- "Banksia aculeata grows as a bushy shrub" I'm not sure what this means?
- "lacking a lignotuber." Explain?
- "the inflorescences are" Explain?
- "The infructescence" Likewise?
- "Oval in shape, the follicles are wrinkled in texture and covered with fine hair, they are 3–4.5 cm" Seems a bit odd, perhaps "and they are"?
- "The obovate seed" Explain?
- "is composed of the wedge-shaped seed body proper" Not sure what this means?
- "cotyledons which" Explain?
- "and perianths" Explain?
- "Like many plants in south-west Western Australia" I think this location should be mentioned much earlier, either under taxonomy or habitat.
- "shorter pistils" Explain?
- "It is killed by fire" Perhaps say "this species" or its name, since the preceding sentence is a description of two general types.
- "but in a recent study the pathogen" This pathogen?
- "Although it was collected by James Drummond, Banksia aculeata was not formally described until 1981" Perhaps mention the date in the intro, otherwise the significance of the rest of the sentence will be lost on those who don't know when Drummond lived.
- "soil-borne water mould" Only described as such in intro.
- Though you haven't commented after all points here, it seems you have addressed all in the article itself? FunkMonk (talk) 18:18, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
Driveby comments from Sainsf: Another hit by Cas Liber. Would like to point out a few things. Sainsf <^>Talk all words 06:02, 4 March 2016 (UTC)
- In the lead, is not the line It generally grows as a dense shrub up to 2 m (7 ft) tall, has leaves with very prickly serrated margins, and unusual pinkish, pendent (hanging) inflorescences; generally hidden in the foliage, these appear during the early summer rather too long? Could be split?
- I think reseeders and resprouters should be in double quotes rather than italics.
- See, looking at Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style/Text_formatting#Italic_type and scrolling down to words as words section, I've been following that and using italics. I'd use quote marks if a sentence or phrase Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 09:02, 4 March 2016 (UTC)
- However both the new foliage and the infructescence are considered attractive May smell of original research.
- Ref. nos. 6 and 8 need not have URLs if they already have DOIs and/or PMIDs.
I see. Yes, this is ready to be a GA now. You and FunkMonk have done a great job. Sainsf <^>Talk all words 11:17, 4 March 2016 (UTC)
- FunkMonk Is the article a GA yet? You said yesterday that it is ready to pass. Sainsf <^>Talk all words 11:18, 4 March 2016 (UTC)