Talk:Balwa Gujran

Latest comment: 10 years ago by CaroleHenson in topic Suggestions

Suggestions

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Some additional suggestions are:

  • The key issue is that the article needs references for the material. Otherwise, it appears to be original research.
  • It would be great to add some wikilinks to names of people or places in the History section.
  • I'm sure that there's a clear connection between the founding of the other towns and Balwa Gujran in the History section, but it's not made clear in the paragraph. It may just need to be reworded for clarity.
  • The Economy section could be made a little clearer, too. It may be that some parts of the long sentences just need to be made their own sentences - right now it's a bit run-on and confusing.

If I can help, let me know.--CaroleHenson (talk) 14:06, 7 May 2014 (UTC)Reply

I added two references as examples to get started. When I went after the coordinates, I found out they were a little different - so I updated them.--CaroleHenson (talk) 14:25, 7 May 2014 (UTC)Reply