Talk:Assignment: Venezuela/GA1
Latest comment: 4 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:13, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 13:13, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead edit
- "It was produced by Sound Masters, Inc. for the Creole Petroleum Corporation (part of the Standard Oil Company of New Jersey) and directed by John H. "Jack" Tobin." - this needs to be mentioned in the production section
- "It is part of the Prelinger Archives and available in the public domain.[2]" - this sentence and its acconymping citation should be copied into the Production section
- References should really be avoided in the lead if they are no quotes per MOS:CITELEAD
Synopsis edit
- "Jim is a middle-level oil engineer who is being relocated to Lake Maracaibo, Venezuela, with his family; wife Ann and two sons." - what was the reason given?
- "Jim is taken on a tour of Maracaibo, Caracas, and Lagunillas to familiarize him with the new country, shown as positive;" - think the text in bold can be reworded to make sense or deleted if it does not add anything to the article
- "all having learnt Spanish already." - beforehand.
Production edit
- "The film is color" - is in color
- "The film is color and 24 minutes in length." - this needs a referenced to verify that this is correct
Analysis edit
- "The film was produced in the context of the Marcos Pérez Jiménez military dictatorship," - try to reword this sentence to avoid a MOS:SEAOFBLUE violation
- "with scholar Lisa Blackmore describing the propaganda and national image of that time having distinct dual purposes:" - as having
- Delink Americans per MOS:OVERLINK
- "Tinker also suggests that anything learnt from the lessons and film were quickly forgotten," - what lessons?
- Briefly explain who Erin Giannini to the uninformed
- Done three of these: I've left the link to United States on 'Americans' - Venezuelans, Colombians, etc. are technically Americans, and the US has no better demonym, so the disambiguation is necessary - and I've haven't added anything about lessons - they are described in the sentence before, I don't think a reader will have forgotten that quickly. Kingsif (talk) 17:29, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
Mystery Science Theater 3000 version edit
- "which were easier to acquire rights to;" - to acquire the rights
- "which she believes Assignment: Venezuela shows very clearly." - disnictly
- Please explain briefly who Chris Morgan to the uninformed
References edit
- References 2 and 7 should have the work that does not mention Archives
- Reference 7 is missing the volume and issue number
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 16:53, 21 May 2020 (UTC)