Talk:A-Yo (Lady Gaga song)/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 19:21, 15 August 2018 (UTC)

• I love this song so I would be interested in doing a review. Aoba47 (talk) 19:21, 15 August 2018 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

• Please add ALT text for the infobox image.
• I would revise this part (Critical reception was mostly positive towards “A-Yo”) to (Critical reception towards “A-Yo” was mostly positive).

Background and release

• Please use “Lady Gaga” on the first use in the body of the article and wikilink her name as the lead and the body of the article should be treated separately.
• For this sentence (However, the venues for the concert series remained undisclosed to have a more intimate approach.), I do not believe the “However” transition is necessary and I would remove it.
• I am not certain if this sentence is entirely necessary (On October 2, 2016, several publications claimed that during the first show of the tour, a new song titled "Million Reasons" would be performed, in addition to "Perfect Illusion”.) given the Dive Bar performances have already passed. I think it would be better to replace this sentence with one saying that she performed the track during the Dive Bar tour. Whether or not, publications speculated that the track would be performed is not necessarily too helpful/informative.
• For this part (During the Dive Bar Tour, Gaga recalled that she and Lindsey), use Lindsey’s full name and use a wikilink as this is the first time you mention her in the body of the article.
• I am confused by the second paragraph; a bulk of the information seems to be focused on “Million Reasons” rather than “A-Yo”?
• I am not sure about the phrasing for this part (but due to popular demand, "Million Reasons" was chosen instead.). To me, “due to popular demand” implies that people demanded “Million Reasons” be specifically released as the second single, rather than the commercial success of the track leading to its upgrade to the second single position. I would revise this part for clarity.
• Make sure that song titles are linked on their first use. “Million Reasons” and “Perfect Illusion” are linked on their second use in the body of the article rather than their first use.

Recording and composition

• Please add ALT text for the image.
• I do not think that New York City needs a wikilink.

Critical reception

• I am a little confused by the structure of this section. Could you explain to me how you divided the informaiton between the two paragraphs?

Commercial performance

• There should be a section about the song’s commercial perfromance as it has charted.

Live performances

• Please add ALT text for the image.
• Unlink Dive Bar Tour as you already linked it in a previous section. I would advise you to look through the article to check for overlinking.
• For this part (Along with "Million Reasons", another song from Joanne,), since you have already introduced “Million Reasons” in another section, I would remove the descriptive phrase “another song from Joanne” as it is not necessary.
• For this part (and the singer doing a honky-tonk and go-go dancinginspired performance.), it should be “does” instead of “doing”.

External links

• I would add the MetroLyrics link here as it is common to add to song articles (it is an official lyric provider).

Final comments

• You have done a wonderful job with this article. I just have a few questions/suggestions, primarily for the “Background and reelase” and the “Critical reception” sections; once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to pass this. Have a great rest of your week! Aoba47 (talk) 19:39, 15 August 2018 (UTC)
  • Hi @Aoba47: extremely sorry that I had missed this review, somehow I failed to notice the message in my talk page Facepalm. I will get to it over the weekend, will that be fine? —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 06:21, 20 August 2018 (UTC)
    • No worries; take as much time as you need. Aoba47 (talk) 15:54, 20 August 2018 (UTC)
      • @IndianBio: Any updates for this? Aoba47 (talk) 01:56, 27 August 2018 (UTC)

Verdict

• Failing due to lack of activity. Aoba47 (talk) 05:46, 28 August 2018 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.