Talk:6th Congress of the Workers' Party of Korea/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Midnightblueowl (talk · contribs) 19:44, 9 December 2013 (UTC) This looks like an interesting article, and I'd be happy to tackle it, TIAN! Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:44, 9 December 2013 (UTC)

Introduction:

• Done "in Pyongyang..." ; mention that the city is in North Korea.
• Done Put a link in to the Workers' Party of Korea here, and perhaps give a brief sentence explaining that this was the country's primary governing party.
• DoneAbbreviations such as WPK and KWP are used without specifying what they are.
• Done "The move was criticised..." – maybe briefly explain why it was criticised ?
• Done "his son Kim Jong-il his successor"; maybe change to "his son Kim Jong-il as his successor..."

Preparations:

• DoneMaybe state the year in which the 5th conference took place ?

Delegates and attendees:

• Done "The 6th Congress was attended by 3,062 delegates with voting rights[2] and 158 without them; this marked an increase of 1,349 voting and 137 non-voting delegates from the 5th Congress.[2]" – you really don't need to cite the same reference twice in this single sentence.

The Congress:

• "Done After the opening remarks, the congress' agenda was decided:[4] "(1) Summing up the work of the Party Central Committee; (2) Evaluation of the work of the Party Central Auditing Committee; (3) Revision of the Party Rules and (4) Election of the central leading agencies of the Party."[4]" Again, no need for the repeated reference in a single sentence.
• Who is Lee Nak-bin ?
  • I honestly don't know, I searched google, and got two hits (this article, a book, and a redirect to WP).. He's clearly a one-hit wonder, or more precise, the political system is so closed to the outside we don't know the majority of the non-Politburo leadership. --TIAYN (talk) 19:38, 10 December 2013 (UTC)
• Done "41.4 percent, compared with 72.2 percent" – perhaps use "%" ?

1st Plenum:

• Done "Thirty-four members" = "34 members"
• Done "percentage" = % ?

Kim Jong-il as successor

• Done "Kim Yong-ju is believed" – why is this in the present tense, and who believed that ? Be specific.
• "Critics" – who are they ?
  • Source doesn't say, but probably a lot of people from the left to the right.... --TIAYN (talk) 19:38, 10 December 2013 (UTC)
• Done "Joseph Stalin received by his successor" – this should be "received from..."

Other thoughts:

• Maybe we could have some pictures of Kim Il-sung and Kim Jong-Il ? Perhaps in a multiple image box ?
  • A none-free image? Does that work? --TIAYN (talk) 19:38, 10 December 2013 (UTC)
    • How about this image: File:Mansudae Grand Monument 08.JPG ? Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:30, 11 December 2013 (UTC)
      • @Midnightblueowl: I uploaded a non-free one (since we don't have access to any free pictures from this specific historical event...) --TIAYN (talk) 20:31, 11 December 2013 (UTC)
• Done Perhaps rename the "Unification" section "Korean Unification" ?
• Done Consider dividing the footnotes into three columns rather than two; I think that it would look a little neater. But it's not essential by any means.

Generally this is all very good; these are just some points that I noticed. Fix these, and it should pass without a problem. Best, Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:17, 9 December 2013 (UTC)

Once again, another great article, TIAYN. I'm happy to pass this as a GA. Well done! Midnightblueowl (talk) 23:53, 11 December 2013 (UTC)