Talk:2017 Catalan general strike/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 03:43, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

I'll review this, comments will be here soon Kingsif (talk) 03:43, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

Style

• Lead a bit too long for article length
• The note on national unions doesn't need to be in brackets
• 'Planning' would be better titled 'Background'
• The sentence "Firefighters and the Catalan police served as supportive, improvised order at some protests" doesn't really make sense - improvising order?
• "Seven Nation Army" should be styled like that ("Seven Nation Army"), not in italics - could also add that it's a song by the White Stripes
• Some odd word usage (possibly from a direct translation of flowery language) that I've replaced with more common terms
• Generally good - just the fixes mentioned above

Coverage

• Lead also a bit too detailed - a lot of it could be moved to 'Planning'
• Coverage suitable and well-managed
• Pass

Illustration

• Unusual top image (media), but it works
• Good use of media
• Pass

Neutrality

• Fine
• Pass

Verifiability

• Sources look good, and are predominantly English
• Pass

Stability

• Been stable for over a year
• Pass

Copyright

• Media appropriately licensed
• Check looks good
• Pass

Overall

• on hold A few style things and a sentence that doesn't make sense. Kingsif (talk) 18:47, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

@Czar: Kingsif (talk) 22:23, 5 October 2019 (UTC)

Hi @Kingsif, appreciate the review! Believe I've addressed your above points in prose except for the national union parenthetical, which I kept as an aside. Let me know what you think and thanks for your time. czar 15:15, 6 October 2019 (UTC)

@Czar: I find the lead still a bit too long, even with the wide montage - is there any way to remove one of the paragraphs? Kingsif (talk) 16:27, 6 October 2019 (UTC)

@Kingsif, done, though I think the lede is weaker for the loss of detail. czar 17:33, 6 October 2019 (UTC)

The lead is just an overview, and it still hits the main points - the article body is for all the detail, and I think it's now got a good balance! Kingsif (talk) 17:39, 6 October 2019 (UTC)

• Well done