Talk:2013 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 19:46, 19 April 2014 (UTC)

• "Particularly hit was Mexico, where tropical storms Barry, Fernand, Tropical Depression Eight, and Hurricane Ingrid all made landfall. Ingrid in particular brought severe impacts, with at least 23 deaths and $1.5 billion (2013 USD) in damage." - there's some repetition here since you use "particularly" in the first sentence and "particular" in the second.

• I'm not particularly good at fixing these :P Jk --12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "On April 10, Colorado State University (CSU) forecast 18 named storms, nine hurricanes, and four major hurricanes." - maintain consistency. Spell out the numbers for all or don't do it for any.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "On May 23, the National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration (NOAA) predicted a range of 13 to 20 named storms, 7 to 11 hurricanes, and three to six major hurricanes. Following less activity than forecast, both agencies reduced their seasonal predictions in early August; CSU predicted 18 named storms, eight hurricanes, and three major hurricanes, while NOAA called for 13 to 19 named storms, six to nine hurricanes, and three to five major hurricanes. Despite the revisions, activity remained far below predictions, at 13 named storms, two hurricanes, and 0 major hurricanes." - Same here.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "Nonetheless, activity fell far below predictions." - Using nonetheless is weird. Reword this.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "It was an above average season in which 15 tropical cyclones formed." - dash between "above" and "average" since they're modifying "season".

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• 'The season was above average most likely because of a lack of El Niño, warmer sea surface temperatures, lower than average sea-level pressures, and near-normal wind shear." - I'd put "most likely" before "above-average".

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "The most intense tropical cyclone – Hurricane Humberto – peaked with maximum sustained winds of 90 mph (150 km/h) on September 11, which is only Category 1 on the Saffir–Simpson hurricane wind scale." - only? Just put "a Category 1 on the Saffir-Simpson hurricane wind scale" after the comma.

• Ok, but it is rather unusual for the strongest storm of the season to be only Category 1--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "After meandering for two days, it degenerated into a remnant low pressure area on December 7,[21] about a week after the official end of hurricane season on November 30." - you already noted it was a week after the official end of the season, remove that part.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "Although 15 tropical cyclones developed, the season set several records due to the weak nature of these systems" - "these" -> "the"

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "The 2013 Atlantic hurricane season was the first since 1994 to feature no major hurricanes." - "The 2013 Atlantic hurricane season" -> "it"

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "The season's activity was reflected with an accumulated cyclone energy (ACE) rating of 36" - ACE should be capitalized.

• FIXED :P--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "Despite strong wind shear and an abundance of dry air, the storm strengthened while initially heading north-northeastward, before re-curving northeastward later that day." - recurving is one word despite what the computer dictionary says.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "Andrea transitioned into an extratropical cyclone over South Carolina on June 7, though the remnants continued to move along the East Coast of the United States, until being absorbed by another extratropical system offshore Maine on June 10." - no need for the comma after "United States".

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "The system moved westward and developed into an area of low pressure over the southwestern Caribbean Sea on June 16." - A wave doesn't develop into a low, a low forms in association with the wave.

• Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• "Despite weakening inland, the circulation became better-defined." - This is confusing; by weakening, do you mean the winds lowered? If so, note that so it makes more sense.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• You say "Barry" a lot in its section; switch up the wording.

• Seriously? I only count 3 uses. FWIW, in most of other sections, the storm name is used 4 times or more. In fact, I think only Dorian is used fewer times in its section.--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

• I'd rather not nitpick much more, so I'll go through and make minor edits that I think might be needed.
• I don't think the second note is necessary.

• Removed--12george1 (talk) 03:55, 20 April 2014 (UTC)