Talk:2012 Macau Grand Prix/GA1
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Harrias in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 12:25, 20 November 2017 (UTC)
I'll take another.
- Lead
- "..having won the event's Qualification Race the.." qualification race probably doesn't need to be capitalised here.
- Entry list
- The flag thing again.
- Report
- "The 202 Macau Grand Prix.." Typo! 2012.
- "..ahead of three of Nasr's Carlin teammates Félix da Costa.." Could do with a semi-colon between teammates and Felix.
- "..both of which being 30 minutes." "were" might be better than "being".
- "Following them were harAbt.." Typo.
- I'm not convinced it is necessary to list the entire grid during the prose of this section (in each of the the qualifying, the qualifying race and the main race sections.)
- "..Mandarin; alas, the pole-sitter regained his lead.." Alas definitely doesn't seem the right word to use here, it seems to apply an editorial voice, rather than an WP:NPOV.
- Classification
- References
- Referencing looks good, spot checks don't reveal any issues. Harrias talk 12:25, 20 November 2017 (UTC)
- @Harrias: I have addressed all of the queries except for reducing the list of the starting grid and the finishing order in the prose. MWright96 (talk) 18:04, 20 November 2017 (UTC)
- @Harrias: Update: have reduced the starting grid in the prose to include only the first twenty qualifiers. MWright96 (talk) 18:43, 20 November 2017 (UTC)