Talk:1997 Michigan Wolverines football team/GA1

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My initial concern is the length of the section on the Rose Bowl. I'd also consider rewording the first sentence in the background section since I don't think people consider a pre-season ranking of 17 to be "low-expectations"

  • It is two or three times as long as most other game sections, but it is two or three more times as important since it was the national championship game.--TonyTheTiger (T/[[Special:Contributions/TonyTheTiger|C]/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:18, 9 September 2010 (UTC)Reply
1998 Rose Bowl has it's own article. I think a drive-by-drive summary isn't needed here. I understand keeping the scoring drives and the end of the game, but the rest can go into the Rose Bowl article per WP:SS. Also this sentence "With no timeouts left, Leaf's spike of the football, but Dick Burleson, the referee from the Southeastern Conference crew, shook his head as Leaf contested the decision" needs to be fixed. Also, you can probably remove the last paragraph of that section because it deals mostly with players from other schools.~DC Let's Vent 19:27, 9 September 2010 (UTC)Reply
On second thought, considering the length of 2005_Texas_Longhorns_football_team#Rose_Bowl_versus_USC, the length of the section seems fine. It still needs a quick copy-edit though, and I still think the last paragraph of the section should go. ~DC Let's Vent 20:05, 9 September 2010 (UTC)Reply
If I take out everything but "On the last day that underclassmen could declare for the 1998 NFL Draft in early January, junior Woodson also decided to forgo his collegiate eligibility." then I have a stub paragraph that would need to be expanded. Thus, I expanded it by giving context to Woodson's decision. The context being which other players decided to enter the draft and which did not.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:18, 9 September 2010 (UTC)Reply
Maybe you could mention where he went in the draft? Or if any players left the team early, or coaches went elsewhere? ~DC Let's Vent 20:21, 9 September 2010 (UTC)Reply
Back then it was a new thing to leave early. Only other name stars from other teams were leaving early, which is why I have added that for comparison. The following year the main coaches were the same (see 1998 Michigan Wolverines football team infobox).--TonyTheTiger (T/[[Special:Contributions/TonyTheTiger|C]/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:27, 9 September 2010 (UTC)Reply
Alright, how about moving it to its own subsection, and maybe mentioning how many seniors left the team. ~DC Let's Vent 03:55, 10 September 2010 (UTC)Reply
Moved to the NFL draft section.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:14, 10 September 2010 (UTC)Reply
I have fixed the offending sentence.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:27, 9 September 2010 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: ~DC Let's Vent 18:23, 9 September 2010 (UTC)Reply

Since it's a minor thing, I fixed it myself. Didn't think I could but WP:GAN allows it. ~DC Let's Vent 03:31, 11 September 2010 (UTC)Reply

So the final result is   passed. ~DC Let's Vent 03:31, 11 September 2010 (UTC)Reply