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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 20:23, 1 January 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hi George, I'll be checking this out...

  • "Hurricanes Luis and Marilyn caused catastrophic damages in the Leeward Islands and Virgin Islands, while also the first and most destructive hurricane to affect those regions since Hurricane Hugo, respectively." - Not a fan of plural "damages". I'm not sure how to interpret the second half of that sentence--reword to clarify?
  • I hope you're ok with my revisions. As for the second part, Luis was the first hurricane to impact those regions since Hugo, while Marilyn was the most devastating there since Hugo.--12george1 (talk) 04:31, 2 January 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "Opal, the strongest and most intense storm of the season, devastation along portions of the Gulf Coast of the United States." - Words are missing
  • "Felix generated strong waves, causing heavy beach erosion in the northeast United States" - Northeast US is a geographic location, capitalize it.
  • "Iris that caused flooding in the Lesser Antilles." - This is not a complete sentence.
  • "Collectively, the tropical cyclones of the season caused over $12.85 billion (1995 USD) in damage and at least 182 deaths." - Fairly minor, but the infobox lists $12.846 billion (exact) and the sentence reads over $12.85 billion. Which one?
  • "At the time, only one Atlantic hurricane season, 1933 surpassed the season's total storms making the season the second most active in recorded history tying with 1887" --> "At season's end, 1995 ranked as the second most active in recorded history, tying 1887" or something like that.
  • "A normal season, as defined by the National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration (NOAA), has 12.1 named storms, of these 6.4 reach hurricane strength, and 2.7 major hurricanes, which are Category 3 or higher on the Saffir–Simpson hurricane wind scale." - Can we get some semicolons in here or split into two sentences?
  • "In December 1994, CSU predicted that only 12 named storms would form and 8 of those would become hurricanes; 3 major hurricanes were projected." - Why only 12? That's average (or above average by CSU definition).
  • "Additionally, the western areas of the Sahara Desert were predicted to have the fourth or fifth rainiest season since 1970." - Explain why that would help TC activity otherwise it sounds disconnected.
  • "The forecast by the WRC in early 1995 was 10 named storms and 6 hurricanes, though there was no prediction on the number of major hurricanes" - Change "though there was" to "with".
  • "It was a well-above average season in which 21 tropical depressions formed, nineteen of which attained tropical storm status, and 11 of these attained hurricane status." - Nineteen --> 19
  • "Although September is the climatological peak of hurricane season, it was much less active with August, with four tropical cyclones developing in that month, and Marilyn, Noel, and Opal eventually strengthened into a hurricane." - "with August" --> "than August" and split this sentence into two. Fix the subject-verb agreement (Marilyn, Noel, Opal strengthened into hurricanes).
  • "The last storm of the season, Hurricane Tanya, developed later in October, and eventually became extratropical on November 1." - Remove the comma after October.

Get back to me when you've addressed the above comments and I'll finish reviewing the article. Don't want to drown you in corrections at one time. :) TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 20:23, 1 January 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • "The season officially began on June 1, 1995, and ended on November 30, 1995, dates which conventionally delimit the period of each year when most tropical cyclones develop in the Atlantic basin." - Forgot this. No need for the years.
  • "The depression initially moved northwestward, before recurving to the north." - No comma.
  • "After briefly emerging over Apalachee Bay, Allison struck near St. Marks with winds of 65 mph (100 m/h)." - k (or lack thereof). :)
  • "While moving rapidly northeastward, Barry made landfall in Hart Island, Nova Scotia, late on July 9 with winds of 50 mph (85 km/h)." - You already told us it held 50 mph until landfall earlier.
  • "Initially, Chantal threatened the Bahamas, and the Government of the Bahamas issued a tropical storm watches and warnings, which were in effect for the southeast and central islands as well as the Turks and Caicos Islands." - A tropical storm watches and warnings?
  • "After the cyclone turned northward, it threatened Bermuda, which prompted a tropical storm watch for the island on July 16, which was canceled on July 18 as the storm passed well northwest of the island." - Break this up.
  • "As the depression curved west-northwestward, it began to strengthen, and was upgraded to Tropical Storm Dean while located only 70 mi (110 km) from the Texas coastline on July 30." - Remove the second comma. Any reason stated why it began intensifying?
  • "The storm continued to slowly weaken as it moved northwestward, and dissipating on August 2 near the Texas–Oklahoma border." - Remove the "and"
  • "Dean dropped mostly light rainfall across Texas, though some areas received more than 17 in (430 mm)." - "Mostly light" and "17 in" are two very different ends of the scale. Looking at the rainfall map, Dean dropped widespread amounts of 6-8". That's not light at all.
  • "Precipitation from the storm caused moderate localized damage." - How? Flooding? Landslides?
  • "The resulting floods caused the evacuation of 20 families in Chambers County[23] and flooded 38 houses in the southeastern portions of Texas." - Adding a reference in the middle of a sentence is generally discouraged. Just put it at the end.
  • "Outside of Oklahoma and Texas, the remnants of the storm dropped rainfall in 10 other states, though minimal damage occurred." - "10 other states" is very ambiguous, can we get a geographic area? Northeast US? Midwest?
  • "A tropical wave exited the west coast of Africa on July 22 and headed toward the Leeward Islands, where the system nearly developed into a tropical cyclone." - Why did it stop?
  • After re-reading the TCR, it appears to have been delayed, rather than stopped. Vertical wind shear delayed the development of a circulation until the wave came near the Bahamas--12george1 (talk) 03:54, 9 January 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "Despite affects from wind shear, Erin continued to strengthen as it moved northwestward, and was upgraded to a hurricane later on July 31." - "affects" to "effects," remove the second comma.
  • "Although many islands in the Bahamas experience high winds and heavy rainfall, damage associated with Erin was fairly minor." - "experience" to "experienced".
  • "In addition, the storm left over one million people without electricity. Several tornadoes were spawned in the state, which also caused some damage. Over 100 houses were also damaged in Alabama." - Chill with the "in addition," "which/were also"s.
No. "Several tornadoes were spawned in the state, which causing damage." TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 9 January 2017 (UTC)Reply
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:31, 10 January 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "Similar damage also occurred in Mississippi, although to a lesser degree." - Contradictory sentence. How about "similar impacts" instead of "similar damage"?
  • "Elsewhere, some areas affected by Erin experienced heavy rainfall." - What areas?
  • "The southern part of the tropical wave that spawned Tropical Storm Erin continued into the Caribbean Sea in late July." - Erin was a hurricane.
  • "As it tracked west-northwestward, preparations were occurring as Felix also posed a threat to the United States." --> "Continuing on its northwest trek, the cyclone also temporarily prompted preparations along the East Coast of the United States"
  • "Felix briefly threatened Bermuda again, but weakened to a tropical storm and turned back to the northeast on August 20." - Switch the order here (say it turned first and then weakened)
  • "...while 20 to 30 houses in North Carolina experience minor damage from rough seas." - "experience" to "experienced"

Will finish reviewing the article tomorrow. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 04:55, 2 January 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • "Gabrielle dropped heavy rainfall in Mexico, where some areas possibly experienced more than 24 in (610 mm) of precipitation" - What makes you think this?
  • "A tropical wave formed over Africa in mid August 1995. By August 19, it crossed over Dakar, Senegal, shortly before entering into the Atlantic Ocean." - Any reason to be so specific with when the wave formed and where it tracked here? You didn't do that with other storms.
  • "Operationally, Humberto was erroneously downgraded to a tropical storm on that same day." - What suggested it remained a hurricane?
  • "Jerry dropped heavy rainfall in Florida, especially in the southern portion of the state." - How much?
  • "Agricultural damage was also reported in southwest Florida." - Specific crops available?
  • "The depression slowly intensified as it tracked between 11 and 16 mph (18 and 26 km/h) west-northwestward under the influence of low- to mid-level flow." - 11-16 mph isnt exactly record breaking or notable. Why not just say steadily west-northwestward?
  • "Although sea surface temperatures were around 80 °F (27 °C)..." - Same general idea here. 27C isn't impressive, why so specific?
  • "You start the first three sentences with the same word (By..) in Karen's impact section.
  • "In the United States, storm surge and high tides were reported along the east coast, leading to two drowning deaths, one in North Carolina and the other in New York." - East Coast is a geographic region, capitalize it. Change the comma after "deaths" to an em dash.
  • "However, the National Hurricane Center did not declare the system as Tropical Depression Fourteen until September 11, while the system was centered 950 mi (1,530 km) southeast of Bermuda." - Operationally, right?
  • "Although the National Hurricane Center predicted that it would intensify into a tropical storm" - No need to keep spelling NHC out.
  • "The depression moved toward the northwest and encountered strong upper-level winds which removed the convection from the low-level center on September 13." - Ok...what happened next?
  • "20 in (510 mm) of rain fell at Saint-Claude, which was the highest precipitation total associated with Marilyn." - Starting a sentence with a number is a no no.
  • "Wind speeds measured on Guadeloupe were also tropical storm force." - Specific values?
  • "Shortly thereafter, the storm began weakening and upon making landfall in Pensacola Beach, Florida, about 12 hours later, winds had decreased to 115 mph (185 km/h), which is Category 3 intensity." - Break this up or reword it
  • "Later that day, the National Hurricane Center noted that, "it is impossible to locate a low level circulation on infrared imagery"." - Really not a fan of using NHC quotes in general. Why can't you just say an LLC was indiscernible?
  • "Operationally, it was originally believed to be weaker." - Is this necessary?
  • "The storm was located to the northeast of the northern Leeward Islands" - This reads weird to me. Why not just say it moved north but then turned southwest?
  • "The names Van and Wendy were the only two names which were not used during 1995." Ok?
  • Add a note after the first damage total (in the lead) that all damage costs are in 1995 USD unless otherwise stated.
  • We don't use bold in the season effects table any longer.
  • References 7, 11 (Hurricanes - General information for Bermuda), 12, 73, 80, and 108 are dead.

I think that's most everything. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)Reply

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