Talk:1965 Burundian coup attempt/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:23, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Link "gendarmerie" appropriately.
  • Done.
• "were angry frustrated" one or the other.
  • Fixed
• "Burundi's monarch" is there a link for that?
  • I could ink that to List of kings of Burundi, but Mwami, the royal title, is already linked.
• "prime minister " link?
  • Done.
• "attempted putsch " putsch? link?
  • Putsch is simply another word for coup, as in Beer Hall Putsch.
    • Then link it to Coup d'état. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
      • Done.
• "militant Tutsi backlash" link Tutsi.
  • Done.
• "states had traditionally had monarchies" delete first "had"
  • Revised
• " 1959–61. " full year for 1961.
  • Done.
• "Burundi seemed to have achieved" sounds like OR. Or is it according to someone?
  • This was interpretation of the source by a Wikipedia editor; removed.
• "leader Louis Rwagasore, was assassinated" how?
  • Added in a plot devised by political rivals with the support of some Belgian officials. Beyond that the details aren't really relevant.
• "Rwagasore's death derailed" His death...
  • Done
• "the late prime minister's" don't do "late", just name him.
  • Done
• " (pictured) angered" pictured when?
  • Date added.
• "Hutu politicians.[9] Another Hutu politician" repetitive.
  • Excised "politician".
• "Parti du Peuple." no link?
  • Not for the Burundian party.
• "seven of the other 10" 7/10 or seven/ten.
  • I've never seen fractions recommend in place of prose outside of a mathematics article
    • I mean use seven and ten or 7 and 10, don't mix numerals and words for comparable items. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
      • Per MOS:NUMERAL, this doesn't seem to be a problem. I understand your qualm but "10" is used elsewhere in the article and I'd prefer to keep it consistent by order of magnitude.
• "arrêté-loi" what's that?
  • Literally a decree-law. As the name suggests, it was basically legislation by executive fiat in Belgian legal tradition. French Wikipedia has a stub article on it.
    • Link please. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
      • Actually found the relevant en article. Linked
• "number of communes in the country" link for communes?
  • Unfortunately, one does not exist that captures what a commune in Burundi is (basically a form of municipality).
• "burgomasters" who are they?
  • Linked.
• "locally elected" hyphenate.
  • Done.
• "paracommandos" link?
  • Linked to Commando.
• "putshcists" typo.
  • Fixed.
• "his departure greatly tarnished" according to whom?
  • That's Lemarchand's analysis of the situation. The literal words he uses are "great discredit", presumably in the eyes of the Burundian public.
    • Say that then. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
      • Done.
• "10 were" 10 what?
  • Hutu politicians, the people mentioned in the preceding sentence.
• "Assembly Paul Mirerekano" overlinked.
  • Fixed.
• "to an easy life" maybe "to a better life"?
  • Changed to comfortable. Lemarchand says he was looking forward to his "European dolce vita".
• "Though it was obvious" to whom?
  • Lemarchand doesn't really specify. I've removed this since it's not all that informative anyhow.
• "1966 Ndizeye" comma after 1966.
  • MOS:DATECOMMA only stipulates that for month–day–year format. Commas are not needed to separate dates form the rest of the sentence in day-month-year formats (see [1] [2]). This is a response to all of your comma concerns.
    • Well that's not the point I was making really, there's a natural pause after the 1966 which a comma would fill. But I'm not in the mood to argue over commas. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
• ISBNs could be formatted consistently.
  • Done.

That's all I can see right now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:54, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

• @The Rambling Man: I've responded to your comments. -Indy beetle (talk) 05:24, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
  • @The Rambling Man: I've responded to your response. -Indy beetle (talk) 02:09, 9 September 2021 (UTC)