Talk:1935 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 04:51, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• "...the most intense tropical cyclone to ever strike the United States as well as in the entire Atlantic basin." - Maybe reword to "...the most intense tropical cyclone in the Atlantic basin on record, and the strongest to make landfall in the United States."?

• That would imply that it was the strongest ever in the basin, not just strongest at landfall. What I'm trying to convey here is that the storm was the strongest at landfall both in the US and the entire basin--12george1 (talk) 05:35, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• How about "...the most intense tropical cyclone to ever strike the United States or any landmass in the Atlantic basin"? Replicate this in the second paragraph of its storm section. 🌧❄ϟ TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 00:38, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• That sounds better. Done--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Although activity was below normal..." - Was it? You say later in the lead that ACE was near normal. Is there a long-term average for NS/HU/MH to mention?

• I think saying near-normal would be based on ACE. Unfortunately I don't think there's an average for NS/HU/MH or ACE prior to 1950--12george1 (talk) 05:35, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• "In early September, the Labor Day hurricane struck Florida twice – the first time as a Category 5 hurricane – resulting in about 490 deaths and $100 million (1935 USD) in damage, mostly in Florida." - Since you only say it struck Florida (and not a broader area like the Southeast U.S.), I don't think it's worth noting it was "mostly in Florida." That's repetitive. Maybe substitute that part with "along its path"?

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:35, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Overall, the storm was attributed to about 2,150 deaths and $16 million in damgae" - Spellcheck

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:35, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• "It is only calculated for full advisories on tropical systems at or exceeding 39 mph (63 km/h), which is the threshold of tropical storm strength." - Subtropical too.

• Done--12george1 (talk) 05:35, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Historical weather maps and ship data indicate that a low-pressure area developed into a tropical depression about 105 mi (170 km) south of Punta Cana, Dominican Republic, at 00:00 UTC on May 15." - Link low-pressure area.

• Done--12george1 (talk) 05:35, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Continuing north-northwestward into the Atlantic, the cyclone intensified into a hurricane while north of the Lesser Antilles at 00:00 UTC on August 19." - It's been in the Atlantic.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:35, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Penned as Newfoundland's "worst gale in 36 years",[8]" - Comma inside quotation. Link gale.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:35, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Charlottetown in Prince Edward Island received 5.6 in (140 mm) of rain over a three-day span; however, how much of this total was directly from the hurricane is unknown." - Why? Was the area affected by another system around the same time?

• Oddly enough, the source doesn't mention any uncertainty. Maybe I should've looked over that section a bit more (I didn't write it).--12george1 (talk) 05:35, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• "In St. John's, Newfoundland, wind gusts averaged 52 mph (83 km/h) and caused extensive property damage. " - The entire point of gusts is that they're not averages. Is this right? I can't check because the link is dead, so make sure you fix that as well.

• I fixed the link. The source says "Average velocity of 83 km/h (45 knots) for wind gusts in St. John’s"--12george1 (talk) 05:35, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

More tomorrow. 🌧❄ϟ TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 04:51, 8 March 2020 (UTC)

• "At approximately 00:00 UTC on September 3, the cyclone intensified into a Category 5 hurricane, with winds peaking at 185 mph (295 km/h),[7] while a weather station on Craig Key, Florida, observed a barometric pressure of 892 mbar (26.3 inHg), the lowest in relation to the storm." - This is a lot. Chop it up.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "The storm made its final landfall on the sparsely populated Apalachee coast near Cedar Key on September 4 as a Category 2." - A Category 2 what

• Category 2 carcinogen, obviously --12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "The storm transitioned into an extratropical cyclone later that day," - Link extratropical cyclone.

• It is linked earlier in the article (next to last sentence of Hurricane Two's first paragraph)--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "The hurricane remained the most intense tropical cyclone in the Atlantic basin until Hurricane Gilbert in 1988 and Hurricane Wilma in 2005." - Sneak "later" before Hurricane Wilma so the audience knows definitively Gilbert once held the record.

• Done--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Additionally, tides reached about 30 ft (9.1 m) above mean water level,[3] while a storm surge of 18 to 20 ft (5.5 to 6.1 m) lashed the Upper Keys" - Link tides and surge.

• Done--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "A train intending to evacuate people to safety arrived too late, with storm surge not allowing the train to advance past Islamorada and instead washing it off the tracks except for the locomotive and tender." - not allowing --> preventing?

• Ok--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Nearly all roofs experienced at least minor damage, while many were blown off, while winds also downed many trees and power lines" - Repetition with "while" here.

• Better?--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "In Virginia, a tornado in Norfolk caused about $22,000 in property damage, while a tornado near Farmville resulted in about $55,000 in damage and two deaths." ---> "In Virginia, one tornado in Norfolk caused about $22,000 in property damage while a second near Farmville..."

• Done--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "High winds in the Norfolk area left an additional $22,000 in damage." - Interesting that the damage totals match. Can you double check this just to be sure?

• After further examination, I think the source was actually referring to the tornado--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "The city of Coatzacoalcos (then known as Puerto México) observed a barometric pressure of 1,001 mbar (29.6 inHg), the lowest in relation to the cyclone." - Do we care?

• I don't even care :P --12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Several vessels may have gone missing during the storm." - Why the ambiguity? Either they went missing or they didn't. :P

• The source doesn't say so in certain terms. I had previously tried to find more details on that. I guess I'll just remove it--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "The hurricane caused widespread destruction in areas of the western Atlantic." - Pretty useless statement. Just tell us where.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "A large storm surge destroyed low-lying coastal towns, particularly in Cienfuegos where numerous homes were destroyed and 17 people died." - Unlink surge here (and make sure the first instance was linked).

• Done--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Around 10:00 UTC on the next day,[7] a ship observed a barometric pressure of 988 mbar (29.2 inHg), the lowest in relation to the storm." - Do we care?

• I don't care if you don't / I don't care if you don't / I don't care if you don't care... ♫ :P --12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "Only four people died in the country." - Only?

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• "In Broward County, the towns of Dania Beach and Davie appeared to suffer the worst damage in the county, with approximately 90 percent of buildings damage to some degree in the former." - Damage to damaged. What happened in Davie?

• I can't find anything more specific aside from several families being left homeless. Davie had fewer than 2,000 people prior to the 60s. I just left Dania Beach there and remove Davie, if that's alright--12george1 (talk) 19:37, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• I don't think the paragraph about borderline systems is necessary.

• Fair enough--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

• References 11, 23, and 40 are dead.

• They didn't hoard enough toilet paper. So they died of coronavirus--12george1 (talk) 07:40, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

Not "tomorrow" like I promised, but better late than never! 🌧❄ϟ TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 00:38, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

I think I got everything. Thanks for the review! --12george1 (talk) 19:37, 14 March 2020 (UTC)