Talk:1929 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 02:49, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "the storm struck Texas, bring strong winds to a large area." - grammar
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "known as the Bahamas hurricane," - is it?
- Actually, it was technically more like a nickname :P --12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "offshore
ofTexas" - offshore is already a preposition
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- You should add that H1 dissipated over Arizona. That is very unusual! There is very little mentioned about the system remaining a TS over land so far. You should include some more observations. I believe HURDAT mentioned that El Paso or somewhere near there recorded TS winds, which was the basis for maintaining it so far inland.
- Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:14, 12 August 2014 (UTC)
- The damage from H1 in the lede doesn't match the section
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- " 60 to 80 mi (97 to 129 km) " - both pairs of units should be rounded
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "as well as a score or more injuries" - since "score" is a pretty archaic word, why not just "several" injuries?
- "Four several and several years ago..."? :P --12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "and telegraph lines, suffered about $365,000 in damage." - drop that last comma
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "A trough developed near Cape Verde around September 11." - you sure it wasn't a tropical wave? And you don't say that this was the genesis for H2.
- Hmm, it probably was a tropical wave, which is a trough--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "the system peaked with maximum sustained winds of 155 mph (250 km/h) and a minimum barometric pressure of 924 mbar (27.3 inHg)." - what was the basis for the estimate for the peak winds?
- Nothing recorded that wind speed. It was adjusted upward significantly from 100 knots. I'm guess it was due to the pressure-wind relationship? "ship the Potomac recorded 924 mb ... suggests winds of 137 kt and 134 kt from the Brown et al. intensifying hurricane pressure-wind relationships ... Winds analyzed to be 135 kt at 18Z on the 25th, up from 100 kt originally." Should I mention the pressure-wind relationship?--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- You have three separate sentences describing boats being ruined or wrecked in the H2 section. Could you please combine?
- I'm not sure how I can do that --12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "Further north" - any time you deal with direction or distance, use "Farther"
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "A devastating tornado was in Fort Lauderdale. The twister damaged a four story hotel, a railway office building, and several cottages." - make one sentence
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "Historical weather maps indicate that a low pressure area was embedded within a west to east oriented stationary front on September 24." - you should add a general location
- Unfortunately, the only thing META shows is "northwest Atlantic Ocean." No coordinates are given, so I can't get anymore specific than that.--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "Early on September 25, a tropical depression formed just west of Bermuda. Later that day, the depression strengthened into a tropical storm." - there are several examples in this article, but this one works well. You have a habit of writing very short, choppy sentences, when one single sentence would work much better.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "Four hours later, sustained winds peaked at 60 mph (95 km/h). " - was this based on the ship report?
- A ship did measure winds of 60 mph, but not at that time.--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "The extratropical remnants accelerated northeastward and then east-northeastward, before dissipating east-southeast of Newfoundland. - when?
- Exactly one month before Black Tuesday :P --12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- "until dissipated well southeast of Newfounland on October 20" - grammar
- Fixed that and the typo that you didn't notice :P --12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- " Strengthening further, the hurricane peaked with maximum sustained winds of 80 mph (130 km/h) and a minimum barometric pressure of 997 mbar (29.4 inHg). - again, on what basis was the peak winds?
All in all, pretty good! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:49, 11 August 2014 (UTC)