Talk:1913 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1
Latest comment: 9 years ago by 12george1 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Cyclonebiskit (talk · contribs) 16:55, 1 November 2015 (UTC)
- General note(s)
- Made some copyedits and factual corrections here and there so the data jives properly. Please double check these.
- If you haven't already, you should apply for membership at newspapers.com through Wikipedia. There's likely a reasonable amount of information that can be gleaned from newspapers which is not presently in the article.
- Hurricane One
After initially directing north-northwestward, the depression accelerated and intensified into a tropical storm on the following day.
– subjects don't match for the contrast the sentence is set up to provide. A later sentence shows no change in the storm's direction so the first part of this doesn't really make sense.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)
- Tropical Storm Three
Based on weather maps and ship data, a tropical depression formed near the west coast of Africa on August 26.
– Need to add "weather maps/data indicate(d)" or "is believed to have formed" (or something to that effect) to preface the formation of the TD.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)
- Hurricane Five
An extratropical cyclone that developed offshore New England transitioned into a tropical storm on October 6 while situated about 325 mi (525 km) northwest of Bermuda.
– More details on the movement and location of the precursor ET low is much desired.
After becoming tropical, the storm continued to move southwestward and approached the Southeastern United States.
– In line with the above comment, there's no mention of previous movement so "continued" doesn't make sense here. There was also a major change in direction that needs to be addressed earlier with the ET segment.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)
- Continuing the theme of more movement info, mention of the system practically stalling over the Carolinas is needed.
- That cannot be determined--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)
The Georgetown Railway and Light Company and the Home Telephone Company suffered the worst damage.
– And that damage would be...? This just leaves me hanging with nothing to grasp on to. Aforementioned usage of a newspaper archive could very well remedy this issue.
- I do not have a newspapers.com subscription, but I searched about this and unfortunately, I think that's about as specific as I can get--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)
All-in-all a decent read, but very much needs attention from a newspaper archive. I'm placing the article on-hold for now to allow you time to address the above concerns. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 17:51, 1 November 2015 (UTC)